高一英语写作课孙博庭

高一英语写作课孙博庭

The Beauty of Writing 高考英语评分原则： 1. 本题总分为25分，按 5个档次 给分。 2. 评分时，先根据文章的 内容和语言 初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。 3.词数 少于80 和 多于120 的，从总分中 减去2 分。 4. 评分时应注意的主要内容为： 内容要点 ， 应用词汇 和 语法结构 的 丰富性 和 准确性 及上下文的 连贯性 。 高考英语评分原则： 5. 拼写与标点符号 是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际影响的程度予以考虑。英，美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。 6. 如 书写较差 以至影响交际，将其 分数降低一个档次 。 7. 语言首先要求准确通顺。 8. 鼓励写出新颖词汇，顺畅连接和复杂结构。 你校英语社团部要组织一次英语赛， 就“是否应该缩短中学生在校时间为 8 小时”这一论题进行辩论，请你作为正方代表，写一份发言稿，内容要点如下： 1. 保证充足睡眠 2. 提高学习效率 3. 增加自主学习时间 注意： 1. 词数 100 左右 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯 3. 辩论稿的开头已为你写好（不计入总词数）。 As a senior high student, I strongly recommend that 语法篇 这第一句写的 … I strongly recommend that This is right we as a senior high student…. I strongly recommend that should shorten school time into eight hours. 你再看这开头 …… I strongly recommend that the time students devoted to studying in school should be reduced to eight hours a day. The main reasons accounting for it are as follows. 这动词错的 … Short student’s time in school can have a good effect on study, it can important for student’s study xiaolu, and increase student’s own time. 原来改书面表达就是改错 …… In my opinion, we must have enough time to study, but we also should keep enough time to relax and sleep, either of them are important. Because of we have time to relax, we can study energetic. Reduce study time also can improve the quality of our school life. 这词汇 … 你再看这词汇 … 欣赏一下这篇文章的句式结构 … If equal amount of work have to be accomplished with a declined school time, study efficiently is expected to be enhanced. Moreover, extra-curricular time will make up more of the students’ schedule. That is to say, chances are we can make a better use of our time. 卷面篇 养眼的 … 当批到下午两点看到了它们 … 太挤了 太乱了 太空了 太潦草了 太花了 太没谱了 老师最恨的作文 … 大锅，标点呢？段呢？ 姐，你长发及腰的字体难掩你每句都错的事实啊！ 神，你别抄阅读理解行不？俺们也会看试卷的！ 老师最喜欢的作文 … Great minds think alike! 一点提示 … 好练的字 笔 笔 过长 答题不可越界 作文五档：（ 从教师阅卷印象角度划分） 漂漂亮亮 （ 21—25 分） 有模有样 （ 16—20 分） 马马虎虎 （ 11—15 分） 稀里糊涂 （ 6—10 分） 一塌糊涂 （ 0—5 分） 近几年来，在新课标试卷中，书面表达趋向于提纲式作文，但是这些提纲只给出了大致的写作方向，没有限制具体内容，属于半开放式的提示；考查应用中的书信，话题与中学生的学习生活密切相关，考生会觉得有话可说，有利于考生的自由发挥。 DISCUSSION: What is a good writing？ How to catch the experts' eye? A good composition language structure Content Beauty be attractive, completed in a limited time! DISCUSSION: What is a good writing？ Content: everything needed included which is related to your view.(内容要完整) （内容要点一个也不能丢，如果人家给的是文字提示，可以用笔在试题处标出1,2,3,4，如果人家给的是图，那要先看懂图的意思，六个图都要看看再动笔，不要看了一个马上就写。） DISCUSSION: What is a good writing ？ Structure: * Good beginning and ending( 好的开头结尾 ) * Well organized and smoothly developed ( 结构合理 , 行文流畅 ) Language: * No Chinglish ( 避免中文式英文 ) * No Grammatical mistakes ( 没有语法错误 ) * With exactly used words and relatively changed sentence patterns ( 词语的准确运用和句式的富于变化 ) 1)Use proper linking words (使用 恰当的连接词 ） How to write a good composition？ 第二节 书面表达 （ 满分25分 ）  假定你是某中学的学生李华。请用英语给出版社的编辑写 一 封信 ， 表达你对现在使用的英语材料的看法 ， 内容主要包括 ： 优点 ：  1. 话题广泛 ；  2 . 图片丰富 ； 3 . 有助于提高 学习兴趣。 建议 ： 适当降低词汇难度。 注意 ： 1 . 词数100左右 ；  2 . 可以适当增加细节 ， 以使用文连贯 ；  3 . 开头语已 你 写好 ， 不 计入 总词数。 2012年高考英语辽宁卷—书面表达 As a result; In addition ; To begin with ; However 使用恰当的连接词 Use proper linking words Dear Editor, As a student reader, I am writing to talk about the English textbooks published by your house. These books have many advantages._________ One of them is that we can find a variety of topics, such as science, culture and history. These topics, I think, are very popular with us students. To begin with In my opinion; Therefore; However; what's more _____________, along with the texts there are many beautiful and colorful pictures, which can help us understand English better. Even the students who used to dislike English have turned out to be interested in the subject. _________, some of the texts have too many new words and expressions which are hard for us. __________, I'd like to suggest changing them into easier ones. what's more However Therefore Avoid Chinglish! 1) Traffic in Shanghai is too crowded. 2) There has a highway connected with Beijing. 3) Though she's almost 40，but she still plans to compete. 4) I forgot my dictionary at home. 5) It will cost us much money to buy one. Language heavy. left is take 改错 I can't understand them when I meet new words, so I have to refer to them in the dictionary. The ability to read English passages is slowly. There is no doubt that English Study need lots of time and efforts. Only by this way, can we keep up with other students. I'm LiHua, a new student of you. 调研考试中部分同学写作中的语言错误 meet with look up low learning in Li Hua yours My English level is common and I can't speak very well. I believe we can get alone well with each other. Besides, I think speaking English is as important as writing English. I study English for 12 years so I think I know English very well. There are some advice in teaching English. ∧ average it along spoken written have studied is 使用较为丰富的句式： ( 常用到的句型结构） 利用不同的句型来表达同一个意思， 能增加文章的文采。 e.g. What a kind boy he is! How disappointed he was ! 感叹句 强调句 e.g. It was this young boy that helped the old granny. I do hope you can come if possible . e.g. Only in this way can you solve this problem. There comes the police car . Hardly had they got to the station when they met the young man. e.g. They read while walking or riding on a bus. Come to me if necessary . e.g. I saw a young lady walking slowly in the street with a handbag in her hand. 倒装句 省略句 with 短语 I won’t believe what he says. ( 使用状语 从句 ) The girl is spoken highly of. Her composition was well written. ( 用定语从句 ) _______________________________ he says, I won’t believe. The girl______________________________ is spoken highly of. No matter what/Whatever whose composition was well written 定语从句 状语从句 assess Please learn to Your composition when you finish it from now. 书面表达评价表 项目 自评 他评 1. 书写工整吗？有没有乱涂乱划 ? 2. 句子开头注意大小写了吗 ? 3. 有没有注意标点符号 ? 4 将文章分段了吗 ? 分成了几段 ? 5 有单词拼写错误吗 ? 几个 ? 6. 有时态错误吗 ? 误用了哪种时态 ? 7. 注意主谓一致了吗 ? 8. 有没有语态的错误 ? 9. 有没有使用关联词 ? 使用得当吗 ? 10. 有没有词性的错误 ? 哪一种 ? 11. 简单句表达正确吗 ? 12. 是否注意使用了复杂的句子结构 ? 13. 表达方式是否多样化 ? 注意长短句搭配了吗 ? 14. 有没有用好词好句 ? 用了哪些 ? 2012年新课标全国卷—书面表达 假定 你是李华 ， 从互联网上得知一个国际中学生组织将在新加坡（Singapore）举办夏令营， 欢迎各国学生参加 。请写 一封电子邮件 申请参加。 内容主要包括： 1. 自我介绍（ 包括英语能力 ) 2. 参加意图（介绍中国） 3. 希望获准。 注意：1. 词数100左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3. 邮件开头和结尾已为你写好。 (1) (2) (3) (4) (4) (5) 2012年新课标全国卷—书面表达 One Possible Version Dear Sir or Madam, I'm Li Hua, I the of the summer camp that you have on the Internet and I am interested in it. I know that you welcome students from different countries and I'd like to take part in it. I've been learning English for 10 years, and I speak fluent English. a middle school student from China. 来自中国的一名中学生。 announcement 通告，告示 发布 posted read 看到 2012年新课标全国卷—书面表达 , I'll be able to tell students from other countries about China and learn about their countries as well. I hope I will be accepted as a member of your summer camp. Looking forward to your reply. Regards, Li Hua What is more 此外 be accepted as 被接受成为 first of all ,to begin with, to start with , in the first place 一：高中英语中表层次的连接词 in addition, besides, furthermore, moreover, on the other hand finally, eventually, in general, in a word, in short, on the whole, to sum up, last but not least because of, on account of , as a result /consequence of due to, owing to, thanks to 二 . 英语作文中表 因果 的连接词 therefore, thus, hence, consequently, since, as, because, however, but, nevertheless, on the contrary, on the other hand 三 .英语作文中表转折的连接词 Bats are long—lived creatures , some _____ __ _a life span of 20 years. Bats are long—lived creatures , some ______ _______ a life span of 20 years. Bats are long—lived creatures . S ome _____ _______ _a life span of 20 years. of them have of which have having