2020届二轮复习书面表达写作技巧之九：如何增加细节

2020届二轮复习书面表达写作技巧之九：如何增加细节

‎2020届二轮复习书面表达写作技巧之九：如何增加细节 补加语句是常见的“增加细节”的方法，这可以使文章显得错落有致，这样不仅使文章在形式上增加美感，而且使文章读起来铿锵有力，从而使作文在内容上更加连贯、丰满。下面介绍补加语句的几种技法：‎ 目的 充实文章，增强连贯性 方法 根据行文走向，适当增加一些与主题相关的语句，或由要点衍生的句子，既起到前引后联的作用，又能补充一些相关信息，帮助阅卷者理解所写内容。同时，还能协调句式，避免句式单调的问题 特色 协调句式，结构多样 技法1　列举具体的实例进行补充说明 ‎①我喜欢读书。‎ I like reading books.‎ ‎→I like reading books, such as novels, short stories, magazines and newspapers.‎ ‎②我要花一些时间和父母在一起。‎ I'll spend some time staying with my parents.‎ ‎→I'll spend some time staying with my parents, chatting with them and doing some housework.‎ ‎③我想找一个像我一样喜欢旅行的笔友。‎ I'd like to seek a pen pal who is interested in traveling just ‎ like me.‎ ‎→I'd like to seek a pen pal who is interested in traveling just like me. If possible, we can travel together or share traveling experiences.‎ 技法2　增添与所写信息相关的神态、动作、心理描写以及背景渲染等内容 ‎①我有时去村西的小河游泳。‎ I go swimming in the river of the west of the village now and then.‎ ‎→I go swimming in the river of the west of the village now and then. The water in the river is very clear.(背景渲染)‎ ‎→Weather permitting, I go swimming in the river of the west of the village now and then.(相关背景)‎ ‎②旅行了一周后，他回到了家。‎ After a week's trip, he returned home.‎ ‎→After a week's trip, he returned home, tired but very happy.(心理描写)‎ 技法3　增加相关信息的时间、地点等内容 ‎①我要和父母一起去超市购物。‎ I'm going to do some shopping with my parents in the supermarket.‎ ‎→I'm going to do some shopping with my parents in the ‎ supermarket and won't be back until about 5：00 in the afternoon.(增加时间)‎ ‎②我已经带来了你让我归还的这两本书。‎ I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return.‎ ‎→I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library.(增加地点)‎ ‎[典例观摩悟法]‎ ‎1．(提醒观众注意)要按时进入电影院。‎ Be sure to enter the theater on time.‎ ‎→Be sure to enter the theater on time.Whoever is late will miss the splendid opening.‎ ‎[分析]　要点句为简单句，补加复合句“Whoever is late ...”，通过指出迟到后果的方式引起观众的注意，同时，也使得句式多样，表达丰富多彩。‎ ‎2．(谈论善款用途)募捐得来的钱将送给最急需的人。‎ The money collected in the charity sale will be sent to those in great need.‎ ‎→The money collected in the charity sale will be sent to those in great need.This will not only help them get through difficulties, but also give them warmth and happiness.‎ ‎[分析]　通过复合句来增加“较复杂结构”，同时也是上一句衍生的“效果”：帮助他们战胜困难，还给予他们温暖和幸福。‎ ‎[专题过关训练]‎ 请适当补加语句，充实下面写作片段 ‎1．(描写英语老师)His class left us students a deep impression.(1)He_tries_his_best_to_make_us_understand_what_he_is_teaching/He_has_a_free_talk_with_us_in_simple_and_humorous_English/He_has_a_good_way_to_make_his_class_lively_and_interesting.He speaks slowly and clearly so that we can follow him well.Meanwhile, he would repeat just in time what the students did not understand.(2)Greatly_inspired,_most_of_us_take_an_active_part_in_his_class/Our_English_has_greatly_improved_with_his_help_and_guidance.‎ ‎2．(说明自己所擅长的两项技艺)As a Chinese, I'm good at many skills related with our traditional culture.But among them, Taichi is my favorite because it does much good to my health.(1)I'm_sure_American_friends_will_be_also_crazy_about_it_after_they_touch_it.And as you know, Chinese cooking is popular all over the world.(2)It_happens_that_I'm_expert_at_it,_and_I'm_glad_to_present_some_traditional_Chinese_dishes_to_everybody.‎ ‎3．(2018•天津高考书面表达)(邀请他的原因)(1)We_are_desperately_in_need_of_your_help.So as the ‎ group leader, I sincerely invite you to join us.I am convinced that with our joint efforts we can undoubtedly get good results.What's more, (2)I will email you our training plan soon, hoping you can offer some constructive suggestions regarding it.‎ ‎4．(2018•浙江高考写作)(应聘志愿者的相关经验) Firstly, I can speak fluent English and (1)I_have_little_difficulty_communicating_with_foreigners.Secondly, I helped receive some visiting foreigners to our school last year.(2)This_experience_is_sure_to_enable_me_to_do_better_this_year.‎ ‎5．(互联网的好处)The Internet is playing a more and more important part in our daily life. We_can_not_only_read_news_from_home_and_abroad,_but_also_get_information,_send_emails_and_attend_online_schools.‎