2020届二轮复习经典写作分步实施指导之四：说服信件

2020届二轮复习经典写作分步实施指导之四：说服信件

‎2020届二轮复习 经典写作分步实施指导之四：说服信件 ‎[试题]‎ 假定你是李华，你的笔友王强最近沉迷于玩电脑游戏，给他带来很多危害。请你给他写一封书信，劝说他戒掉这个不良习惯，并提出建议。内容包括：‎ ‎1．浪费了学习的时间；‎ ‎2．对身心健康造成危害；‎ ‎3．你的建议。‎ 注意：1.词数100左右；‎ ‎2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。‎ ‎[一]写作分步实施 第一步：准确审题，理行文脉络，拟写作要点 ‎1．审题：①文体：建议信　②人称：主要是第一、二人称 ‎③时态：主要是一般现在时 ‎2．拟点：通过研读题目，根据写作背景介绍和内容要求可以从以下四个方面来写作。‎ ‎①开头：陈述得知笔友的状况后的心情。‎ ‎②说明沉迷于玩电脑游戏的危害(浪费时间、损害身心健康，一些游戏充满暴力)。‎ ‎③提出如何戒掉网瘾的建议。(早摆脱，多读书、多运动等)‎ ‎④结尾：表达希望。(希望建议会有所帮助)‎ 要点1：我听说你沉迷于玩电脑游戏。(be addicted to)‎ I_heard_that_you_are_addicted_to_playing_computer_games.‎ 要点2－①：它会让你浪费太多宝贵的时间。‎ It_will_make_you_waste_too_much_valuable_time.‎ 要点2－②：长时间玩游戏会损害你的健康。‎ Playing_games_for_a_long_time_will_do_harm_to_your_health.‎ 要点2－③：一些游戏充满暴力。‎ Some_games_are_full_of_violence.‎ 要点3－①：我强烈希望你可以摆脱它，越早越好。(break away from)‎ I_strongly_hope_that_you_can_break_away_from_it.The_earlier,_the_better.‎ 要点3－②：你可以多读好书、多做运动或参加一些社会活动来开阔你的视野。‎ You_can_read_more_good_books,_take_more_exercise_or_participate_in_some_social_activities_to_broaden_your_horizons.‎ 要点4：我希望以上建议会对你有所帮助。期待你的好消息。‎ I_hope_the_advice_above_will_be_helpful_to_you.Looking_forward_to_your_good_news.‎ 第二步：添加细节，文意更丰满，表达更亮眼 为使内容更充实，我们需要对要点进行适度拓展，适当使用一些较复杂的句式结构以提升作文档次。例如：‎ ‎1．要点1可增加主句“我很担心”，从而把要点1升级为v.ing形式短语作状语；‎ ‎2．要点2－①可增加定语从句“这些时间应该来做什么”；‎ ‎3．要点2－②可以增加“长时间玩游戏的具体危害”；‎ ‎4．要点2－③可增加“暴力游戏的危害”。‎ 拓展要点1: 听说你沉迷于玩电脑游戏，我很担心。(v.ing形式短语作状语)‎ Hearing_that_you_are_addicted_to_playing_computer_games,_I_felt_very_worried.‎ 拓展要点2－①：它会让你浪费太多宝贵的时间，这些时间应该花在你的学习上。(定语从句)‎ It_will_make_you_waste_too_much_valuable_time_which_should_be_spent_on_your_study.‎ 拓展要点2－②：长时间玩游戏会损害你的健康，尤其是对你的眼睛。‎ Playing_games_for_a_long_time_will_do_harm_to_your_health,_especially_to_your_eyes.‎ 拓展要点2－③：一些游戏充满暴力，这将对你的心理健康有害。(定语从句)‎ Some_games_are_full_of_violence,_which_will_be_harmful_to_your_mental_health.‎ 第三步：连句成文，排语句顺序，重衔接过渡 本文属于建议信，可采用“三段式”结构组织全文。写作时要注意谋篇布局，运用恰当的连接词把基本要点和拓展要点连接起来。可用to begin with， in addition， worse still， therefore等作好文章的衔接过渡。‎ ‎[参考范文]‎ Dear_Wang_Qiang，‎ Hearing_that_you_are_addicted_to_playing_computer_games,_I_felt_very_worried._To_begin_with,_it_will_make_you_waste_too_much_valuable_time_which_should_be_spent_on_your_study.In_addition,_playing_games_for_a_long_time_will_do_harm_to_your_health,_especially_to_your_eyes.Worse_still,_some_games_are_full_of_violence,_which_will_be_harmful_to_your_mental_health.‎ Therefore,_I_strongly_hope_that_you_can_break_away_from_it.The_earlier,_the_better.You_can_read_more_good_books,_take_more_exercise_or_participate_in_some_social_activities_to_broaden_your_horizons.‎ I_hope_the_advice_above_will_be_helpful_to_you.Looking_forward_to_your_good_news.‎ ‎ Yours，‎ Li_Hua 训练材料：高级词汇和复杂句型运用 ‎1．(2014•安徽高考书面表达) 每个人都会遇到像你这样的问题。如何解决这个问题非常重要，这里有一些建议。(solve)‎ Everybody_will_meet_such_a_problem_like_you._How_to_solve_it_is_very_important_and_here_is_some_advice.‎ ‎2．(2013•北京高考书面表达)我认为这幅图是在告诉我们通常梦想和现实之间是有区别的。(reality)‎ I_think_the_picture_is_telling_us_that_there_is_usually_a_difference_between_one’s_dream_and_reality.‎ ‎3．(2017•北京高考)Solving (solve) the safety problem well enough to move forward in AI seems to be possible but not easy.‎ ‎4．为了解决这个问题，我和我的朋友一心想要给学校写点建议。‎ In_order_to_solve_the_problem,_I, together with my friends, am bent on writing some suggestions to our school.‎ ‎5．The bell rang, and signaled that school was over.‎ ‎→The bell rang, which_signaled_that_school_was_over.(非限制性定语从句)‎ ‎→The bell rang, signaling_that_school_was_over.(分词作状语)‎ ‎6．As is known to all, emotional or mental problems can_arise_from_a physical cause.‎ 众所周知，身体上的原因可以引起情绪或精神上的问题。‎ ‎[用准]　arise为不及物动词，表示“出现，发生”时，主语一般为argument, difficulty, misunderstanding, problem, quarrel, trouble等抽象名词，无被动语态。‎ ‎7．(2015•江苏高考书面表达)开车时你越小心越好。事故往往是由疏忽大意造成的。‎ You_can’t_be_too_careful_while_driving._Accidents_often_arise_from_carelessness.‎ ‎8．说实话，我对如何解决这个问题感到困惑。(solve)‎ To be honest, I’m at a loss how_to_solve_the_problem.‎ ‎9．会议结束了，他示意该走了。(signal)‎ The meeting was over; he_signaled_that_it_was_time_to_leave.‎ ‎10．休息时，他开始处理课上出现的问题。(arise)‎ ‎①At break, he got down to dealing with the matters arising_from_his_class.(分词作定语)‎ ‎②At break, he got down to dealing with the matters which_arose_from_his_class.(定语从句)‎ ‎11．(2016•全国卷Ⅱ完形填空) Powerful, yes, but not always accurate. For years I dealt_with (与……打交道) my travel agent only by phone.‎ ‎12．(2013•广东高考完形填空)It seems that number sense is something we have in_common_with_(与……相同) many animals in this world, and that our human ability is not much better than a crow’s.‎ ‎13．(2015•广东高考写作)在我看来，在我们老师的帮助下我们把组织一些课外活动成为一项规定会更好。‎ In my opinion, it is better to make it a rule that we organize some afterclass activities regularly with_the_help_of our teachers.‎ ‎14．(2016•全国卷Ⅱ书面表达)As I know, you are good at taking pictures. Therefore (＝As_a_result), I’m writing to you to invite you to participate.(用本单元短语替换加黑词)‎ ‎15．(2018•6月浙江高考写作)当我在一家旅行社作兼职工作时，我积累了一些相关经验。(as引导时间状语从句)‎ I accumulated some related experience as_I_worked_parttime_in_a_travel_agency.‎ ‎16．(2016•北京高考书面表达)我们做得很好，因此我们被邀请与我们学校的所有学生分享我们的想法和经验。(so ... that ...)‎ We did so_well_that_we_were_invited_to_share_our_idea_and_experience_with all the students of our school.‎ ‎17．(2016•北京高考书面表达)郑和在海上航行了28年，到过30多个国家。因此，中国经济发展得更快，中国被世界上更多的人所知。‎ Zheng He spent 28 years on the ocean journeys and went to more than thirty countries. As_a_result,_China’s_economy_developed_faster_and_China_was_known_by_more_people_in_the_world.‎ ‎18．In no way should_you_lose_heart_when you are faced with difficulties.‎ 面对困难时，你决不应该失去信心。‎ ‎19．只有用这种方式他们才能独立成长、真正成功。‎ Only_in_this_way_can_they_grow_up_to_be_independent_and_become_truly_successful.‎ ‎20．(2015•浙江高考书面表达)对于组织班级活动我们或许有不同的观点。我们也许有不同的方法来解决这一情况。‎ We may have different opinions in organizing class activities. We may have_various_ways_to_deal_with_such_a_situation.‎