2020届二轮复习经典写作分步实施指导之九：建议信件二

2020届二轮复习经典写作分步实施指导之九：建议信件二

‎2020届二轮复习 经典写作分步实施指导之九：建议信件二 ‎[试题]‎ 假定你是李华，你的英国朋友Leslie打算到中国成都大熊猫繁育研究基地(Chengdu Research Base of Giant Panda Breeding) 参观，请你写封邮件，给他一些建议。内容包括：‎ ‎1．出行方式；‎ ‎2．出游季节；‎ ‎3．其他注意事项。‎ 注意：1.词数100左右；‎ ‎2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。‎ ‎[一]写作分步实施 第一步：准确审题，理行文脉络，拟写作要点 ‎1．审题：①文体：建议信　②人称：主要是第二人称 ‎③时态：主要是一般现在时 ‎2．拟点：通过审题，由题目和写作要求可以从以下三个方面来写作。‎ ‎①开头：陈述得知消息后的个人心情。‎ ‎②主体：提出建议，出行方式(乘飞机和高铁)；出游季节(在秋天参观)；其他注意事项(记住穿步行鞋)。‎ ‎③结尾：表达希望。‎ 要点1：我很高兴得知你打算到中国成都大熊猫繁育研究基地参观。(more than)‎ I’m_more_than_glad_to_know_you_will_pay_a_visit_to_Chengdu_Research_Base_of_Giant_Panda_Breeding_in_China. ‎ 要点2－①：对你来说乘飞机和高铁都很方便。‎ It_is_convenient_for_you_to_travel_both_by_airplane_and_by_highspeed_train.‎ 要点2－②：在秋天参观也是一个好主意。‎ It_is_also_a_good_idea_that_you_take_a_tour_in_autumn.‎ 要点2－③：一定要记住穿步行鞋。‎ Do_remember_to_wear_walking_shoes.‎ 要点3：希望你在中国玩得愉快。‎ Hope_you_will_have_a_good_time_in_China.‎ 第二步：添加细节，文意更丰满，表达更亮眼 为使内容更充实，我们可以通过添加定语或状语对要点进行适度拓展。例如：‎ ‎1．要点2－①可以添加because引导的原因状语从句说明乘飞机和高铁都很方便的原因；‎ ‎2．要点2－②可以添加when引导的定语从句来说明这时候参观的好处；‎ ‎3．要点2－③可以添加because引导的状语从句介绍这个地方很大。‎ 拓展要点2－①：对你来说乘飞机和高铁都很方便，因为从附近的飞机场和车站到达基地都很容易。(because引导原因状语从句)‎ It_is_convenient_for_you_to_travel_both_by_airplane_and_by_highspeed_train_because_it_is_very_easy_to_get_to_the_base_from_the_nearby_airport_and_station.‎ 拓展要点2－②：在秋天参观也是一个好主意，这个时候你或许有机会看到新生的熊猫宝宝。(when引导定语从句)‎ It_is_also_a_good_idea_that_you_take_a_tour_in_autumn,_when_you_may_have_a_chance_to_watch_newlyborn_baby_pandas.‎ 拓展要点2－③：一定要记住穿步行鞋，因为基地的庞大超出了你的预料。(because引导原因状语从句)‎ Do_remember_to_wear_walking_shoes_because_the_base_is_large_beyond_your_expectation.‎ 第三步：连句成文，排语句顺序，重衔接过渡 本写作可采用三段式作文，第一段可用The following are my suggestions.作为过渡句承接上文，引出下段；第二段可增加first， second， at last衔接词，作好衔接过渡；第三段可用表达希望作为结尾。‎ ‎[参考范文]‎ Dear_Leslie，‎ I’m_more_than_glad_to_know_you_will_pay_a_visit_to_Chengdu_Research_Base_of_Giant_Panda_Breeding_in_China.The_following_are_my_suggestions.‎ First,_it_is_convenient_for_you_to_travel_both_by_airplane_and_by_highspeed_train_because_it_is_very_easy_to_get_to_the_base_from_the_nearby_airport_and_station.Second,_it_is_also_a_good_idea_that_you_take_a_tour_in_autumn,_when_you_may_have_a_chance_to_watch_newlyborn_baby_pandas.At_last,_do_remember_to_wear_walking_shoes_because_the_base_is_large_beyond_your_expectation.‎ Hope_you_will_have_a_good_time_in_China.‎ Yours_sincerely，‎ Li_Hua 训练材料：高级词汇和复杂句型运用 ‎1．(2016•天津高考书面表达)我们最为欣赏的是你们有强烈的团队精神，使我们高效地完成了任务。(appreciate)‎ What_we_appreciated_most_was_that_you_had_a_strong_teamwork_spirit,_which_allowed_us_to_complete_our_tasks_very_efficiently.‎ ‎2. (2014•福建高考书面表达)只要我们热情地追求我们的梦想，我们最终一定会成功。(succeed)‎ As_long_as_we_have_the_enthusiasm_to_follow_our_dream,_we_are_sure_to_succeed_eventually.‎ ‎3．(2017•11月浙江高考写作)饭后，每个人都会收到一个吉祥饰物和一个装着幸运钱的红包，并互相说一些幸运的话语。‎ After the meal, a lucky charm and a red pocket which contains lucky money will be given to everyone and some lucky words are said to each other.‎ ‎4．(2015•江苏高考书面表达)交通问题不仅影响着我们的日常生活，而且也可能威胁到人们的生命。‎ The_traffic_issue_not_only_affects_our_everyday_life,_but may also threaten people’s lives.‎ ‎5．(2015•陕西高考书面表达) 我曾帮助她成功地举办了几次班级英语活动，这得到了老师和同学们的赞赏。‎ Successfully, I have lent a helping hand to her in several English activities of my class, which_has_been_appreciated_by_both_teachers_and_my_classmates.‎ ‎6．(2016•6月浙江高考书面表达)这句名言告诉我们，如果我们想取得成功，不仅要周密计划，还要彻底实施。‎ The_saying_tells_us_that_if_we_want_to_succeed,_we should not only plan carefully but also act it out thoroughly.‎ ‎7．她忙着给花浇水，因此没有注意到发生的一切。‎ She was_employed/employed_herself_in_watering_the_flowers,_so she did not notice what was happening.‎ Employed_in_watering_the_flowers,_she did not notice what was happening.(过去分词短语作状语)‎ Employing_herself_in_watering_the_flowers,_she did not notice what was happening.(现在分词短语作状语)‎ ‎8．(2017•天津高考书面表达)I am busy with my lessons now, for the College Entrance Examination, which is very important to me, is near.am_employed_in ‎9．1．听众被深深地打动了，掌声经久不息。(affect)‎ ‎①The audience was_deeply_affected,_and they warmly applauded for a long time.‎ ‎②Deeply_affected,_the audience warmly applauded for a long time.(分词作状语)‎ ‎③The audience, who_was_deeply_affected,_warmly applauded for a long time.(定语从句)‎ ‎10．众所周知，观看暴力电视节目真的对孩子有害。‎ ‎①As we know, watching violence on TV really_harms_children. (harm vt.)‎ ‎②As we know, watching violence on TV really does_harm_to_children/does_children_harm. (harm n．)‎ ‎③As we know, watching violence on TV is_really_harmful_to_children. (harmful)‎ ‎11．(2015•四川高考阅读D)Their cheery song brightens many a winter’s day. But robins are in_danger_of (在……危险中) wearing themselves out by singing too much.‎ ‎12．(2014•广东高考完形填空)According_to (根据) a recent research, the most common argument between parents and teenagers is that regarding untidiness and daily routine tasks.‎ ‎13．(2015•四川高考书面表达)至于说普通话，最好多注意发音。‎ As for speaking Mandarin, it’s better to_pay_much_attention_to_pronunciation.‎ ‎14．(2014•湖南高考写作)众所周知，鞋子在生活中发挥着重要作用，因为它能保护我们的脚不受伤害。(protect ...from)‎ As is known to us all, shoes play an important role in our life, for it can_protect_our_feet_from_being_hurt. ‎ ‎15．(2018•全国卷Ⅰ书面表达)如果你按照我告诉你的去做，我相信你会玩得很愉快。(as)‎ If_you_do_as_I_tell_you,_I am sure you will have a great time.‎ ‎16．(2015•全国卷Ⅰ书面表达)我们学校的报纸上有一个栏目叫“外国文化”。(there be ...)‎ In the newspaper of our school there_is_a_column_called “Foreign Cultures”.‎ ‎17．为了保护中国长江江豚(the finless porpoise)免于灭绝，我们真诚希望你们能采取一些措施。‎ In_order_to_protect_the_finless_porpoises_from_extinction,_we sincerely hope you can help take some measures.‎ ‎18．我们要积极参加各种体育运动并注重心理健康，它与身体健康同等重要。‎ We_need_to_be_active_in_all_kinds_of_sports_and_pay_attention_to_mental_health,_which is equal to physical health.‎ ‎19．Yet in modern society somebody has to do ordinary jobs such as cleaning streets because this ‎ is the way society is organized.(要点句)‎ ‎20．许多运动员参加奥运会为的就是能为祖国赢得荣誉。(so that) ‎ Many athletes take part in the Olympic Games so that they can win glory for their homeland.‎