2020届二轮复习经典写作分步实施指导之十：感谢信

2020届二轮复习经典写作分步实施指导之十：感谢信

‎2020届二轮复习 经典写作分步实施指导之十：感谢信 ‎[试题]‎ 假定你是李华，就读于一所全英语教学的中学。你在上周举行的歌唱比赛中得了第一名，其间你的美国音乐老师Mr. Green给你提供了一些帮助。 请你用英语给他写一封感谢信。‎ 注意：1.词数100左右；‎ ‎2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。‎ ‎[一]写作分步实施 第一步：准确审题，理行文脉络，拟写作要点 ‎1．审题：①文体：感谢信　②人称：主要是第一、二人称 ‎③时态：主要是一般过去时 ‎2．拟点：本文未给出具体的内容要求，具有较大的开放性，写作时很容易遗漏要点。通过审读题目，可以从以下三个方面来写作。‎ ‎①开头：点明写信目的。(感谢帮助)‎ ‎②主体：具体介绍过程。收获(取得第一名)；帮助(选择歌曲，给出建议、指导)；结果(取得大的进步)。‎ ‎③结尾：再次表示感谢。‎ 要点1：我写信是为了真诚感谢您对我参加上周举行的歌唱比赛的帮助。(gratitude)‎ I_am_writing_to_extend_my_sincere_gratitude_for_your_help_with_the_singing_contest_held_last_week.‎ 要点2－①：我在比赛中获得了第一名。‎ I_won_first_place_in_the_contest.‎ 要点2－②：您帮助我选择了最适合我的歌曲。‎ You_helped_me_choose_the_song_which_suited_me_most.‎ 要点2－③：您给了我一些关于如何把歌唱好的宝贵建议。‎ You_gave_me_some_valuable_advice_on_how_to_sing_well.‎ 要点2－④：您总是耐心地指出错误，并帮助我改正它。‎ You_were_always_patient_to_point_out_the_mistake_and_helped_me_correct_it.‎ 要点2－⑤：在您的真诚和无私的帮助下，我取得了很大的进步。‎ With_your_sincere_and_selfless_help,_I_made_great_progress.‎ 要点3：我想再次对您表示我的感谢，亲爱的格林先生。‎ Once_again,_I_would_like_to_express_my_thanks_to_you,_my_dear_Mr.Green.‎ 第二步：添加细节，文意更丰满，表达更亮眼 为使内容更充实，我们需要对要点进行适度拓展。注意适当使用较高级的词汇或较复杂的句式结构，部分要点句可添加定语、状语等。例如：‎ ‎1．要点2－①可增加状语“多亏了您的指导”；‎ ‎2．要点2－②可升级为强调句型；‎ ‎3．要点2－④可增加让步状语从句“无论何时我犯了错误”；‎ ‎4．要点2－⑤可增加并列句“努力最终得到回报”，使句意表达更完整。‎ 拓展要点2－①：多亏了您的指导，我在比赛中获得了第一名。(thanks to)‎ Thanks_to_your_guidance,_I_won_first_place_in_the_contest.‎ 升级要点2－②：正是您帮助我选择了最适合我的歌曲。 (强调句型)‎ It_was_you_that_helped_me_choose_the_song_which_suited_me_most.‎ 拓展要点2－④：无论何时我犯了错误，您总是耐心地指出来，并帮助我改正它。(no matter when ...)‎ No_matter_when_I_made_a_mistake,_you_were_always_patient_to_point_it_out_and_helped_me_correct_it.‎ 拓展要点2－⑤：在您的真诚和无私的帮助下，我取得了很大的进步，我们的努力最终得到了回报。(并列句)‎ With_your_sincere_and_selfless_help,_I_made_great_progress_and_our_efforts_paid_off_in_the_end.‎ 第三步：连句成文，排语句顺序，重衔接过渡 本写作可采用“三段式”结构组织全文要点。衔接成文时，要注意要点间的逻辑关系，要点间可用in my view， besides作好衔接过渡，使文章顺畅，过渡自然。‎ ‎[参考范文]‎ Dear Mr. Green，‎ I_am_writing_to_extend_my_sincere_gratitude_for_your_help_with_the_singing_contest_held_last_week.‎ Thanks_to_your_guidance,_I_won_first_place_in_the_contest.In_my_view,_it_was_you_that_helped_me_choose_the_song_which_suited_me_most.Besides,_you_gave_me_some_valuable_advice_on_how_to_sing_well.No_matter_when_I_made_a_mistake,_you_were_always_patient_to_point_it_out_and_helped_me_correct_it.With_your_sincere_and_selfless_help,_I_made_great_progress_and_our_efforts_paid_off_in_the_end.‎ Once_again,_I_would_like_to_express_my_thanks_to_you,_my_dear_Mr.Green.‎ Yours sincerely，‎ Li Hua 训练材料：高级词汇和复杂句型运用 ‎1．(2017•北京高考书面表达)泰山位于山东省，长期以来一直是旅游胜地，许多中国传奇(legendary)故事都与之有关。(attach)‎ Located_in_Shandong_Province,_Mount_Tai_has_long_been_a_popular_tourist_attraction,_with_many_Chinese_legendary_stories_attached_to_it._‎ ‎2．(2014•四川高考书面表达)因此，当我坐在教室做试卷时，感到精力旺盛，信心十足。(confident)‎ So_while_sitting_in_the_classroom_and_doing_my_papers,_I_felt_confident_and_was_full_of_energy.‎ ‎3．(2018•天津高考书面表达)附在这个邮件中的是我为我的小组制订的训练计划，我希望你能读一下，看看它是否实用。‎ Attached_to_this_email is the training plan I have worked out for my team, which I hope you’ll read to see if it’s practical.‎ ‎4．自从那时起，我就养成了与朋友有规律地打篮球的习惯，这有助于我身体更强壮、变得更自信。‎ Since then, I have_formed_the_habit_of_playing_basketball with my friends regularly, which helps me to grow stronger and become more confident.‎ ‎5．(2015•全国卷Ⅱ书面表达)在那之后，我们将唱他们最喜爱的歌曲，表演民间舞蹈。‎ After_that,_we’ll_sing_their_favourite_songs_and_perform_folk_dances.‎ ‎6．(2015•天津高考书面表达)我认为这些捐赠的书不仅能使你更熟悉中国，而且有助于提高你的汉语。‎ I believe these donated books will not only make_you_more_familiar_with_China but help improve your Chinese.‎ ‎7．他总是乐于帮助他人，因此在这儿大家都熟悉他。(familiar)‎ ‎①He is always willing to help others, so everyone here is_familiar_with_him.‎ ‎②He is always willing to help others, so he is_familiar_to_everyone here.‎ ‎8．我在街上见到她时，她装作不认识我，这确实使我很伤心。‎ ‎①She pretended_that_she_didn’t_know_me when we met in the street, which really made me upset.(pretend that ...)‎ ‎②She pretended_not_to_know_me when we met in the street, which really made me upset.(pretend to do ...)‎ ‎9．Sometimes they may play to passersby in the street or subway so_that_they_can_earn_some_extra_money for themselves or to pay for their instruments.‎ 有时他们可能在街上或地铁里为过路者演奏，这样他们可以为自己或自己要买的乐器多挣一些钱。‎ ‎10．The musicians were to play jokes on each other as well as play music, most_of_which was based loosely on the Beatles.‎ 组成乐队的音乐人演奏音乐，还彼此打趣逗笑。这些玩笑和音乐大多都在模仿“甲壳虫”乐队。‎ ‎11．Freddy and his band could not go out anywhere without being followed.‎ 弗雷迪和他的乐队无论走到哪里都会有人跟随。‎ ‎12．Their personal life was regularly discussed by people who did not know them but talked as_if_they_were_close_friends.‎ 一些不认识他们的人也在不断地讨论他们的私生活，而且就像是他们的密友一样在谈论他们。‎ ‎13．(2017•6月浙江高考完形填空)Now Alia waited for the war to end and dreamed_of (梦想) peace and a new library.‎ ‎14．(2010•湖北高考完形填空)He taught her how to rely_on(依赖) her other senses, specifically her hearing, to determine where she was and how to adapt to her new environment.‎ ‎15．(2016•北京高考书面表达)说实在地，郑和，明代的一位探险家，是我在中国历史上最喜爱的人物。‎ To_be_honest,_Zheng He, an explorer in Ming Dynasty, is my favorite figure in Chinese history.‎ ‎16．(2017•全国卷Ⅰ书面表达)Besides(＝In_addition), in order to learn Tang poetry well, you’d better get some information about Tang Dynasty before class.(用本单元短语替换加黑词) ‎ ‎17．(2016•北京高考书面表达)在他的一生中，他写了大量优秀的诗歌，这些都对中国文化产生了巨大的影响。(“名词/代词＋介词＋关系代词”引导的定语从句)‎ During his lifetime, he wrote a great number of excellent poems, all_of_which_have_a_great_effect_on Chinese culture.‎ ‎18．(2016•6月浙江高考书面表达)然而，一个计划如果没有实际执行，是不会有结果的。(双重否定句式)‎ However, a plan can bear no_fruit_without being actually carried out.‎ ‎19．因此，在购买时，你要依靠你的经验和对每双(鞋)的感觉。‎ So_you_have_to_rely_on_your_experience_and_on_the_feel_of_each_pair_as_you_shop.‎ ‎20．只有在那时我才意识到与所有的朋友脱离关系且从不与他们联系是多么地傻。‎ Only then did I realize that it was so foolish of me_to_break_away_from_all_of_my_friends and never contact them.‎