高考英语作文高分技巧 刘世烽

高考英语作文高分技巧 刘世烽

‎    ‎ 高考英语作文高分技巧 ‎---让高考写作变成一种休闲 广州南沙大岗中学 刘世烽 摘要：英语书面表达虽然篇幅短小，但方寸之地乾坤大。如何在英语高考中获得高分常困扰着高中师生。许多学生视作文为猛虎，望而止步。本文探讨两种让写作变成休闲方法：1.运用经典高考高分句型，增强文章表达的逻辑性，结构上的条理性 语言的准确性，使得文章看起来很有“面子”，也变得好写，写作就变成了一种休闲；2. 考纲纲明确划定了24个话题。就考生的写作范围而言，基本上都是在重复自己写过的话题。多些储备，选准升华点，回归熟悉话题，文章就写得快，写作就变成了一种休闲。‎ 关键词：英语写作 高分句型 升华点 熟悉话题 休闲 休闲方法一: 活用高考高分句型 , 使得文章好写 作文好不好，不是考生说了算，而是改卷老师说了算 。通俗点讲，改卷老师认可就行。在奥运、亚运、世博前，北京、广州和上海都要搞面子工程。漂亮的新娘子是打扮出来的。无论是优秀还是基础差点的学生都要对作文进行包装。高考改作文时平均一篇30-40秒, 在这样短的时间里，评卷老师给出高分，他认可的是什么？清洁的卷面，及高级词汇和句型武装下的流畅严密的表达往往最能得到老师的认可。英语高分作文秘诀有四个字：卷面、表达。作文想拿高分就一定要使用吸引阅卷老师眼球的句型来搞点“面子工程”。 活用高考高分句型 ， 使得文章看起来漂亮，耐看，好写。下面列举8种很“装面子”的高分句型。‎ ‎1 There is no doubt that/ there is no denying that /it can not be denied that ‎ ‎1).毫无疑问，只有在我们能从电视节目吸取到有用的知识的时候，我们才可以成为一个成功的电视观众。‎ There's no doubt that only when we get the useful knowledge from the talk shows can we become a successful TV watcher.‎ ‎2)‎ ‎.毫无疑问，良好的师生关系可以让学生更开心地吸收知识，并且使教学更加有价值。‎ There is no denying that good teacher-student relationship can make students learn knowledge more happily and teaching more valuable.‎ ‎3).诚实,毫无疑问是我们要时刻记在心中的一个重要的品质。. ‎ There is no denying that honesty is such an important character that we must keep it in mind in our lifetime. ‎ ‎2．I am firmly convinced that ‎ ‎1).我坚信只有通过合作才可以让像经济危机这样的悲剧走向尽头。‎ I am firmly convinced that only by cooperating can such a tragedy as the financial crisis come to an end.‎ ‎2).我坚信只要我们拥有毅力和决心，我们就会拥有永远的成就。‎ I am firmly convinced that so long as we possess perseverance and determination, we will make permanent achievements.‎ ‎3).温家宝总理坚信中华民族拥有坚定的信念，可以克服所有的挑战。‎ Primer Wenjiabao is firmly convinced that Chinese nation can overcome all kinds of challenges with unyielding spirit.‎ ‎3．it is … that…强调句 ‎1).只有拥有耐性的青少年才能学会应对不同情况下的问题。‎ ‎ It is with great patience that teenagers can learn how to solve the problems in various circumstances.‎ ‎2).不是一个人的运气而是他们的努力带来成功的。（ 机遇）‎ ‎ It is not one’s luck but one’s efforts that brings success. ‎ ‎3).我们要依靠书本上和生活中的知识来实现梦想。‎ It is the knowledge not only from books but also from our life that can help us to achieve our target.‎ ‎4 so+adj/adv +do/does +v +that ‎ ‎1).18岁的生日如此珍贵，我将永远铭记心中。‎ So precious my 18-year-old birthday is that I will cherish it in my deepest heart forever. ‎ ‎2). 他们对偶像是那样的着迷以致他们迷失了自己，忽略了学习。‎ So addicted to their idols are they that they almost lost themselves including neglecting their studies. ‎ ‎3). 它的领土辽阔，不同的地方气候差异较大。‎ So large is its territory that climates vary greatly from place to place. ‎ ‎5． not….but…‎ ‎1）. 反对者认为乞丐利用人民的同情心，不为社会做贡献，毁坏料我们城市的形象。‎ ‎1.The objectors thought that the beggars who not devoted labour to the society but took advantage of people’s sympathy( compassion), were damaging the image of our city.‎ ‎2）不是书本上的知识，而是实践经验中获得的知识推动社会快速发展。‎ It is not to learn knowledge form books but to gain knowledge from practice and experience that will contribute to the swift development of the whole society.‎ ‎6．not only… but also….‎ ‎1）.宠物不仅可以安慰孤独的老人而且可以让我们的生活充满快乐。‎ Pets could not only comfort lonely old people but also make our life filled with happiness ‎2）.这篇文章展示了不给他人带来一点点麻烦的理念，从中我们不仅可以认识到关爱他人的意义而且学会了怎样去安慰别人。‎ The passage shows their concept of never giving others even a slight degree of discomfort , from which we should not only realize the significance of caring for others but also learn to comfort others. ‎ ‎7. In no circumstance/in no case /by no means/ on no condition 倒装句 ‎ ‎1）你无论如何也不能拒绝她的爱和关心。‎ In no circumstance should you refuse her love and concern. ‎ ‎2）我们决不能只考虑文具的好看的外表，相反，对于学生来说，在老师和家长的指导下购买和使用文具是更加明智的。‎ In no circumstance should we just think of its beautiful appearance, on the contrary, purchasing and using stationeries under the guidance of teachers and parents are wiser behavior for students. ‎ ‎3）我们的生活中充满了不可避免的挑战，我们决不能对害怕，尽力去战胜它就行了。‎ Since our life is filled with unavoidable challenges, in no circumstance could we be afraid of them, Just try our best to overcome them. ‎ ‎8． Only when/ 介词短语 倒装句 ‎1）只要你独立地和负责任地做事，你才会长大成人。‎ Only when you take actions independently and responsibly can you make yourself a real adult.‎ ‎2）只要我们服从所有规则和以友善的态度对待别人，和谐社会将会出现，这不但需要人们之间的真诚对待而且要我们紧密地联系。‎ only when we obey all the rules as well as treat each other with friendly behavior can a harmonious society appear, which not only requires people’s sincerity but also close relationship among them.‎ ‎ 高分句型的运用使得文章句式丰富，表达连贯 ，前后呼应，文章好看，耐看, 有深度。经典句型的运用使得文章主题句更加突出，更容易巧妙回归熟悉话题，灵活切换，举一反三，使文章好写，写得快，有速度。从而解决高考英语作文中写不透，写得慢，得分低的问题。高考英语作文写作的目标有两个：写得耐看；写得要快。经典句型的运用使得文章看起来很有“面子”，可以帮助你完成这个目标。‎ 下面结合广州市2010第二次模拟读写任务作文，列举两篇24分最高分作文，展示活用高考“高分句型”所带来的实际效果。‎ 阅读下面的短文 .然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文.‎ ‎ We all know the story of "The tortoise and the hare". The hare lost because he was overconfident. So slow-and-steady wins the race. but did you know the tortoise and hare raced three more times? After his loss the hare challenged the tortoise to a second race and this time was without stopping from start to finish. There was no doubt that he won. The lesson this time was that fast-and-consistent beats slow-and-steady. then the tortoise challenged the hare to a third race over a slightly different route. The hare ran at top speed until he reached a broad river. Although the finishing line was just a kilometer past the river the hare had no way ‎ of crossing and once more the slow-and-steady swimming tortoise came out on top.‎ ‎ The hare and the tortoise, by this time, had become good friends. They realized they could perform better together than separately. So they decided to have one more race. But this time they would work as a team. They started off and this time the hare carried the tortoise till the riverbank. There, the tortoise took over and swam across the river with the hare on his hack. On the opposite bank, the hare again camed the tortoise and they reached the finishing line together much more quickly than they had been able to alone They both felt a greater sense of ‎ Satisfaction than they' did earlier. [写作内容]‎ ‎ 1．以约30个词概括这段短文的内容；‎ ‎ 2(1)以约120个词就第四次龟兔赛跑的寓意发表个人观点。内容包括：‎ ‎ (1)如何利用自身优势：‎ ‎ (2)如何发挥团队精神。‎ ‎ [写作要求】‎ ‎ 1．在作文中可使用自己的亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子：‎ ‎ 2．作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。‎ ‎ 学生例文1 （5+19）‎ ‎ Cooperation and self advantages ‎ ‎ Due to three races between the hare and the tortoise, they realize the significance of cooperation, with which drives them to team up to finish the forth race. Making good use of cooperation and self advantages leads to success.‎ ‎ There’s no doubt that it is of great importance to make good use of our self advantages. We should try every effort to contribute our ability to achieving our ambition when we are faced with challenges. Also, a complete preparation can help us to use our self advantage. It’s known to all that no one can live alone. Only by teaming up with others can we gain more chance to succeed. A team needs respect. In no circumstance should a teammate laugh at another .A team will become ‎ stronger if every one of it respect each other by heart.‎ ‎ Not only self advantages but also cooperation are the essential factors of receiving success. I am firmly convinced that one can achieve his ambition through his effort and cooperation while one must fail if he yields to the difficulties and never turn to others for help or team up with them 学生例文2 （ 4+20）‎ Indicating that the tortoise and the hare have raced for 4 times, the passage shows that they helped each other at last and finished quickly ,which emphasizes the importance of cooperation. ‎ There is no doubt that everyone has his own advantages，which may greatly range from fields to fields. And it is of great significance that we make good use of our own advantages. Firs of all, we should remind of ourselves that our advantage is various and we have to find out what subject our advantages contribute to. Secondly, so essential is our practice that we should use it and practise it frequently. ‎ However different we are, at no time should we ignore the importance of cooperation. Whatever things we face, we should give encourage to each other so that the power of a team will increase. Most importantly, we ought to try our best to devote ourselves to the team, making different problems defeated by different kinds of members. ‎ I am firmly convinced that only when we make every endeavor to show our advantages and tem up with each other will the difficulties be coped with, which will lead us to a brilliant future.‎ 点评：‎ ‎1.两篇作文卷面整洁 ‎2.句式丰富，表达严密 ‎ A.名词性从句There’s no doubt that it is , I am firmly convinced that，it is of great significance that ‎ B.倒装句Only by teaming up with others can we, In no circumstance should a teammate laugh, only when we make every endeavor to show our advantages and ‎ tem up with each other will the difficulties be coped with, which will leads us to a brilliant future , so essential is our practice that we should use C.巧用关联词Not only self advantages but also cooperation are the essential ‎ ‎3. 注意了句型的叠加功能。即1+1 大于2. 如：I am firmly convinced that only when we make every endeavor to show our advantages and tem up with each other will the difficulties be coped with, which will lead us to a brilliant future。此句中运用了3种句型：I am firmly convinced that 引导的名词性从句，only when引导的倒装和which引导的定语从句，增加了表达难度系数，达到了加分的效果。‎ 从句型的高级程度上来看，在高分作文中，这两篇作文都算上乘。最值得一提的是，第一篇范文借助相关的句型，表达的严密性和流畅性一流，文章结构严谨，意思清晰流畅。在众多作文中脱颖而出，获得24分的最高分。在表达过程中，一定要注意逻辑联系。”高分句型”清晰的逻辑结构不仅可以使考生顺畅地表达自己的思想和观点，而且可以使评卷老师轻松、准确地明白考生想要表达的意思。高分就是这样得到的。活用高考高分句型 , 使得文章好写 写作就变成了一种休闲。‎ 休闲方法二: 选准升华点，回归熟悉话题，使文章写得快 每一篇作文,，都有升华点,且不止一个。当同学把握了这一点，就可以把文章写得有深度。但对于高三学生而言，写得好是不够的，还要写得快。因为升华点不止一个，所以如果将升华点切入自己熟悉的，有准备的相关话题 ，写作速度就能够迅速提升，实现我们的写作目标：质量＋速度。‎ 阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。‎ Dear Big Paul: ‎ ‎ I’m a Senior 3 student in Guangzhou. I’m writing to share my seatmate—Xiaohua’s story with you. He is a new comer from a poor countryside of Sichuan‎ ‎Province.‎ ‎ Although he tries his best to learn Cantonese, Xiaohua still has heavy accent. Because of this, some of our classmates laugh at him once he opens his mouth. Although feeling embarrassed, Xiaohua never gets angry with them. However, I can feel his loneliness and want to help him to change this situation. ‎ ‎ Besides this problem, Xiaohua is made fun with by other classmates because he has been wearing the same clothes for the past two months—an old school uniform, which looks tight and small. His appearance is simple, but he is highly intelligent. Since he came to our class, Xiaohua has become one of the top students in my class. He is a combination of simplicity and complicity. I admire him very much.‎ ‎ What do you think of my seatmate? I would be grateful if you could give me some advice or comments.‎ ‎ Liu Jun ‎ [写作内容]‎ 假设你是英语周报的编辑Big Paul, 你准备给刘军回信，以下是信的内容（信的开头和结尾已经为你写好）：‎ 以约30词概括上文小华面临的困难。‎ 以约120个词谈谈你对所概括这个困难的看法， 并包括如下要点：‎ 你读完这封信后的感受；‎ 你对小华面临这一困难的建议或看法；‎ 表达你对小华的评价和祝福。‎ ‎[写作要求]‎ 你可以使用实例或其他论述方法支持你的观点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用阅读材料的句子。信中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。‎ 学生例文1 Dear Liu Jun I am glad to receive your letter ‎ ( Summary) In your letter, you talked about your seatmate xiaohua, who was often laughed at for his poor Cantonese and old clothes, even though he is kind and intelligent about which you admire.‎ ‎ After reading your letter, I feel a little sad. Your classmates who laugh at xiaohua may not be bad, because they are still young and like making something fun. But your deskmate must be down without friends and supports. So in my opinion, you can make friends with your seatmate and help him to go through the hardship.‎ ‎ For xiaohua, the most important thing is to build up self-confidence and ask for help. It is less difficult to learn a language if one is living in around it s atmosphere. What xiaphua should do is practice and talking as much as possible. Don’t be shamed. If he has accent, try to correct it; and if it is funny laugh with others. There’s no need t be lonely. What' more, the clothes. Since xiaohua comes from a poor countryside, he can ask for help from school and classmates, most of whom are kind-hearted and willing to help.‎ ‎ As far as I’m concerned, one shouldn‘t be judged by his appearance. I hope that xiaphua will make Guangzhou be his second home and achieve his goal with his hard work and high intelligence. ‎ 点评：例1表达流畅，无太多语病。但没有明显主题，缺失升华点，缺乏深度，论据有些罗嗦，结尾有点偏题。 ‎ ‎ 学生例文2 Dear Liu Jun I am glad to receive your letter ‎(Summary) Made fun of by other classmates due to his heavy accent and clothes he wears, XiaoHua is always optimistic to cope with them though he feels a little lonely, which stimulates you to help him immediately.‎ ‎ After reading your letter, I feel a little sad. Maybe your classmates are still young and just make it for fun. But in this case your deskmate must be down without friends and supports. You can make friends with your seatmate and help him to go through the temporary difficulty.‎ ‎ For Xiaohua, the most important thing is to keep an optimistic attitude, build up self-confidence and ask for help. It is less difficult to learn Cantonese if one lives in GZ. Speaking as much as possible is the most effective way to smooth away this problem. Never care about others’ jeer and enjoy losing face. Take it easy. At the same time, asking for other’s help is a positive way whenever one comes across frustration and trouble in life.‎ ‎ I am firmly convinced that as long as XiaoHua is optimistic ,he can defeat whatever difficulties in his life. Only when one has an optimistic mind can he lead ‎ a successful and happy life ‎ I hope that xiaohua will make GZ his second home and achieve his goal with his hard work and intelligence.‎ 点评： 例2为例1的修改版。‎ ‎ 比较 ：概要部分：例2运用分词，介词短语，定语从句，结构合理，要点齐全，并且切入了升华点：optimistic ；例1句式简单，缺失升华点 正文部分：例2主题句突出，举例简洁到位，环环相扣，结尾点题升华。‎ ‎ 本文大意：作为贫困生晓华，勤奋而且成绩优秀，但少数同学却嘲笑他的口音和着装 。对于小华面临这一困难的建议或看法，其实我们有很多话题可以切入。如：1.如何适应新环境 2.如何面对困难 3.如何面对偏见 4.如何保持乐观 5.如何保持自信 6.如何迎接挑战等。这是很关键的一步。当然这些话题一定要早有储备，熟记相关话题的精彩句子，作为主题句和结论的备用材料，稍作修改，为我所用。这样，学生就会觉得有内容可写，写的透，所写的文章与众不同。换句话讲，就是要化用自己已经写过的文章形成要写的文章。这样文章的深度和广度都有了，速度也上去了。‎ ‎ 如：对小华面临这一困难的建议或看法，回归以前熟悉的话题。‎ 话题1：never lose your optimism ‎1.I am firmly convinced that as long as our mind is optimistic , we can defeat whatever difficulties in our life, as we know, life is mixture of happiness and sorrow. No one can absolutely grantee his life against depression as well as sorrow. Therefore, we’d better cheer up to defeat against obstacles instead of complaining all the time.‎ ‎2. Only when one has an optimistic mind can he lead a successful life as well as convey love and warmth to others, making the world full of harmony.‎ ‎3. I have gained the confidence and courage to fight against any trouble any trouble that may come up in the future because I know now that hope is always there for us if we don't give up. ‎ 话题2： Changes Make Paths ‎1. The world is changeable and there are changes in every second. Though you can’t change the world, you can change yourself so as to adapt to the change. Only then can you succeed.‎ ‎2. My personal experience makes me strongly believe in the saying that changing yourself rather than changing the world is the basically philosophy of living a wise life. Only when you change yourself can you change your own world. Some factors are just too stubborn to change but we’re not.‎ ‎3. To conclude, changing ourselves doesn’t mean that we yield to difficulties or flinch from them. So never refuse to change yourself as changes will make paths. ‎ ‎ 话题 3： Challenges Make Us Who We Are ‎1 since our life is filled with unavoidable challenges, in no circumstance could we be chosen to cooperate with three other students to take part in an important competition. But I was not skillful enough to be afraid of them, Just try our best to overcome them. Though challenges bring us pain, they finally shape us and make us stronger.‎ ‎2. Just as the saying goes." NO, pains, no Gains.” challenges offer chances to check and improve ourselves. Instead of running away from it, we ought to face them bravely and seek for the right solutions. Only in this way can we conquer them and really grow up.‎ 话题 4： Learn to Release Our Stress (difficulty)‎ ‎1. As far as I am concerned, stress has become something that we can’t avoid, and the way to live better is to learn some methods to release yourself. When it comes to our students, we should have a positive attitude towards exams and try not to make ourselves too nervous. When you feel stressful, try to do some outdoor activities to refresh yourself. Only in this way can we face our stress properly and lead a happy life.‎ ‎2. I believe that the pressure (not too much though) will help push us to study harder, make greater progress and eventually reach our desired destination. So. In order to study well under pressure, I divide my activities into study and relaxation. Whatever difficulties I meet, I always remain optimistic and try to convert pressure into motivation.‎ 其实例2就是借用了 “Never lose your optimism ”中的划线句子，移花接木，为我所用。‎ 高考考纲明确划定了24个话题。就考生的写作范围而言，基本上都是在写自己和别人写过的话题，其作文所反映的主旨和所揭示的道理也基本上是自己写了不知多少次的。写作并不难，多些储备，选准升华点，回归熟悉话题，写作就变成了一种休闲。‎ 写作变成了一种休闲，既是一种方法，又是一种境界。当然通往休闲的方法不止一种。作为高中英语教师，只有自己领悟到一种切实有效的方法，引导学生达到这种境界，才能让学生领略写作带来的乐趣。‎ ‎ ‎