2020届二轮复习经典写作分步实施指导之一：建议信件

2020届二轮复习经典写作分步实施指导之一：建议信件

‎2020届二轮复习 经典写作分步实施指导之一：建议信件 ‎[试题]‎ 假定你是李华，下面是你的英国笔友Shirley写给你的一封电子邮件，请结合你自己的实际情况给她回复，并给出合理的建议。词数100左右。‎ Dear Li Hua，‎ I spend most of my time studying and hardly talk to any of my classmates. Sometimes I don’t care much about others, but I do want to talk.I just don’t know what to talk about and how to begin a conversation.‎ ‎______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________‎ I feel so lonely. How I wish I had a good friend! Could you give me some advice?‎ Yours，‎ Shirley ‎[一]写作分步实施 第一步：准确审题，理行文脉络，拟写作要点 ‎1．审题：①文体：建议信　②人称：主要是第二人称 ‎③时态：主要是一般现在时 ‎2．拟点：通过审题，根据题目和内容要求可以从以下三方面来写作。‎ ‎①开头：点明写信目的。(指出这个问题很常见，引出写信目的)‎ ‎②主体：给出具体的建议。(自信并对同学微笑；与同学交谈；乐于帮助同学)‎ ‎③结尾：提出希望。(希望建议对对方有用)‎ 要点1－①：这个问题在中学生当中是常见的。‎ The_problem_is_common_among_middle_school_students.‎ 要点1－②：对此，我写信给你一些建议。‎ I’m_writing_to_give_you_some_advice_on_it.‎ 要点2－①：你应当自信并对你的同学微笑。‎ You_should_be_selfconfident_and_smile_at_your_classmates.‎ 要点2－②：试着与同学交谈。‎ Try_talking_with_your_classmates.‎ 要点2－③：你应该乐于帮助同学。‎ You_should_be_ready_to_help_your_classmates.‎ 要点3：我希望你会发现这些建议有用。‎ I_hope_you_will_find_these_ideas_useful.‎ 第二步：添加细节，文意更丰满，表达更亮眼 拟定的要点比较简单，彼此孤立，为了使行文连贯、满足词数要求，我们需要补充一些要点和添加细节。例如：‎ ‎1．增加开头语：很高兴收到你的邮件，以引起下文；‎ ‎2．要点1－①可以用定语从句表达；‎ ‎3．要点1后增加结果“遵照这些建议你就可以摆脱这种情况”；‎ ‎4．要点2－①可添加“自信并微笑对待同学的原因及产生的结果”；‎ ‎5．要点2－②比较空洞、单调，可添加定语“和什么样的同学交谈”；‎ ‎6．要点2－③可添加条件状语从句“如果你的同学在生活或学习中遇到困难”；‎ ‎7．要点2后可补充结论句：一旦你重新获得了自信，你就能交到尽可能多的朋友。‎ 补充开头语：很高兴收到你的邮件。(glad)‎ Glad_to_receive_your_email.‎ 拓展要点1－①：你提到的那个问题在中学生当中是常见的。(定语从句， mention)‎ The_problem_you_mentioned_is_common_among_middle_school_students.‎ 补充要点1：遵照这些我给你的建议，你就可以摆脱这种情况。(祈使句＋and＋陈述句)‎ Follow_these_advice_I_give_you,_and_you_may_get_out_of_the_situation.‎ 拓展要点2－①：相信你自己。你最大的问题是缺乏自信心，所以你必须做的就是自信并对你的同学微笑。你的微笑表明你对他们很友好。(表语从句，宾语从句，be friendly to)‎ Believe_in_yourself._Your_greatest_problem_is_that_you_lack_selfconfidence,_so_what_you_must_do_is_to_be_selfconfident_and_smile_at_your_classmates.Your_smile_will_show_that_you_are_friendly_to_them.‎ 拓展要点2－②：试着与一位和你一样腼腆的或和你有同样兴趣的同学交谈。(定语从句)‎ Try_talking_with_a_student_who_is_as_shy_as_you_or_who_shares_the_same_interest_with_you.‎ 拓展要点2－③：如果你的同学在生活或学习中遇到困难，你应该乐于帮助他们。(条件状语从句)‎ If_your_classmates_are_in_trouble_in_life_or_study,_you_should_be_ready_to_help_them.‎ 补充结论句：一旦你重新获得了自信，你就能交到尽可能多的朋友。(once, regain)‎ Once_you_regain_your_confidence,_you_can_make_as_many_friends_as_possible.‎ 第三步：连句成文，排语句顺序，重衔接过渡 本写作可采用总分式结构组织全文。在主体要点2中的几个要点之间可以用“first of all， next， last but not least”等表示顺序的连接词连接起来，使文章显得层次分明，衔接紧凑，过渡自然。‎ ‎[二]参考范文 Dear Shirley，‎ Glad_to_receive_your_email.The_problem_you_mentioned_is_common_among_middle_school_students._So_I’m_writing_to_give_you_some_advice_on_it._Follow_these_advice_I_give_you,_and_you_may_get_out_of_the_situation.‎ First_of_all,_believe_in_yourself.Your_greatest_problem_is_that_you_lack_selfconfidence,_so_what_you_must_do_is_to_be_selfconfident_and_smile_at_your_classmates.Your_smile_will_show_that_you_are_friendly_to_them.Next,_try_talking_with_a_student_who_is_as_shy_as_you_or_who_shares_the_same_interest_with_you.Last_but_not_least,_if_your_classmates_are_in_trouble_in_life_or_study,_you_should_be_ready_to_help_them.Once_you_regain_your_confidence,_you_can_make_as_many_friends_as_possible.‎ I_hope_you_will_find_these_ideas_useful.‎ Yours，‎ Li_Hua 训练材料：高级词汇和复杂句型运用 写作中的词汇应用 ‎1．(2018•全国卷Ⅲ书面表达)我过去不喜欢体育活动，因此经常感冒，在学校表现不佳，这确实使我感到伤心。(dislike, suffer, upset)‎ I_used_to_dislike_sports_activities._Therefore_I_often_suffered_from_a_cold_and_behaved_poorly_in_school,_which_really_made_me_upset.‎ ‎2．(2014•重庆高考写作)然而，在我看来，我们沉迷于玩智能手机是不明智的，因为我们可能会忽略生活中其他重要的事情，如友谊和体育锻炼。(concern, ignore)‎ However,_as_far_as_I’m_concerned,_it_is_not_wise_for_us_to_be_addicted_to_playing_with_smartphones_because_we_may_ignore_other_important_things_in_life,_such_as_friendship_and_taking_physical_exercise.‎ ‎3．(2016•江苏高考书面表达)人们有时会对他们是否应该投票给那些更优秀的人或者他们更熟悉的人感到非常不安。‎ People sometimes feel_very_upset_at_whether_they_should_vote_for those who are better or who are more familiar to them.‎ ‎4．(2017•全国卷Ⅱ书面表达)就我个人而言，你剪纸练习得越多，你就会越擅长它。‎ As_far_as_I’m_concerned,_the more you practise papercutting, the better at it you will become.‎ ‎5．(2017•天津高考书面表达)我将竭尽全力为即将到来的期末考试做好准备。‎ I’ll_do_everything_in_my_power_to_prepare_well_for_the_coming_final_exam.‎ ‎6．⑤由于有许多难题要解决，今晚我不能参加这个聚会了。‎ With_a_lot_of_difficult_problems_to_settle,_I won’t come to the party this evening.‎ ‎7．③更糟糕的是，随着自然环境的破坏，市民将遭受疾病的传播之苦。‎ What’s worse, with natural environment damaged, citizens would suffer from the spread of diseases.‎ ‎8．(2014•北京高考书面表达)如果你愿意，我想在8月份康复后和你一起去。‎ If_you_like,_I’d_like_to_go_there_together_with_you_in_August_when_I_have_recovered.‎ ‎9．(2016•全国卷Ⅰ书面表达)我知道您的日程安排得很满，不过如果您能花点时间检查并做些必要的修改，我将不胜感激。(补全句子)‎ I know you have a very busy schedule, but I’d be very grateful if you could take some time to_go_through them and make necessary changes.‎ ‎10．(2014•四川高考书面表达)I am very glad to receive your letter, in which you asked me about how I was doing (＝getting_along) in the College Entrance Examination.(用本单元短语替换加黑词汇)‎ ‎11．(2018•北京高考书面表达)然后我教他们如何泡茶。我坐在一张桌子旁，在泡茶的过程中解释了这个过程的每一步。(用状语从句的省略补全句子)‎ Then I showed them how to make tea. I sat at a table, explaining every step of the process while_making_tea.‎ ‎12．(2018•北京高考书面表达) 是语言和文化课程使这所大学出名。(用强调句型补全句子)‎ It_is_the_language_and_culture_courses_that make the university famous.‎ ‎13．(2015•湖南高考写作)我的老师说我给全班同学树立了好榜样。他还补充说每个人应向我学习。‎ My teacher said I set a good example to all of my classmates. He also added_that_everyone_should_learn_from_me.‎ ‎14．(2017•天津高考书面表达)我很高兴地告诉你，我和我所有的老师和同学相处得很好。我在学习上取得了很大的进步，尤其是在英语方面。‎ I’m pleased to tell you I’m_getting_along_well_with_all_my_teachers_and_classmates. And I have made great progress in my study, especially in English.‎ ‎15．将近一天之后，他才意识到他的错误并向他的朋友Peter道歉。It_was_nearly_a_day_before he realized his mistakes and said sorry to his friend Peter. ‎