【英语】2020届二轮复习书面表达评分细则结合试题解读

【英语】2020届二轮复习书面表达评分细则结合试题解读

‎2020届二轮复习书面表达评分细则结合试题解读 书面表达真题例举 第二节 书面表达（满分25分）‎ 假定你是李华，正在教你的英国朋友Leslie学习汉语。请你写封邮件告知下次上课的计划。内容包括：‎ ‎1. 时间和地点；‎ ‎2. 内容：学习唐诗；‎ ‎3. 课前准备：简要了解唐朝的历史。‎ 注意：‎ ‎1. 词数100左右；‎ ‎2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。‎ 官方范文：‎ Hi Leslie,‎ ‎    I'm writing to tell you about the Chinese class next week. Let's meet at two Tuesday afternoon at the coffee shop near my school again. I plan to help you study some poems of the Tang dynasty which is an important part of Chinese civilization. Many of the Tang poems have greatly influenced Chinese literature. And we learned them at a young age. I’ll help you read and understand the selected poems before we have a ‎ discussion of them. To make it easier, I suggest you study and get some knowledge of the Tang dynasty in advance.‎ ‎    See you then!‎ ‎                                  Best,‎ ‎                                 Li Hua 范文点评(邓北平)‎ ‎  全文共7句，105词。其中5个简单句，3个主从复合句。一个带定语从句，另一个带时间状语从句，第三个带宾语从句。两个结构：to make it easier和in advance。全文文气贯通，文词简明。内容点到为止，思维就近发散。即所谓“中通外直，不蔓不枝”者。遣词、造句、布局都在考生能控制的范围。‎ Hi Leslie,‎ ‎    I'm writing to tell you about the Chinese class next week. Let's meet at two Tuesday afternoon at the coffee shop near my school again.——作答示例 ‎     开门见山，直奔主题，简明扼要，点明时间、地点与事件。‎ ‎    I plan to help you study some poems of the Tang dynasty which is an important part of Chinese civilization.——作答示例 ‎   点明唐诗发生的时代，而这个时代是中华文明的重要时期。定语从句说明唐朝这一时期的意义。加强，也有暗含为什么选择唐诗的缘由。点出中国传统文化的根基，是切题的就近发散。‎ ‎  Many of the Tangpoems have greatly influenced Chinese literature.——作答示例 ‎     进一步指出唐诗的在中华文化中的分量与影响。回应前句，支撑前句，憨实前句。也是切题的就近发散。‎ ‎     And we learned them at a young age.——作答示例 ‎     顺势一转。既然如此重要，所以中国孩子从小就要学习唐诗。自然的过渡与衔接，进一步强化唐诗的当代地位与现代中国人对传统文化的尊崇。‎ ‎     I’ll help you read and understand the selected poems before we have a discussion of them. ——作答示例 ‎     在讨论之前先有阅读与理解的过程。既有师友之谆谆，亦有对学习者加持之意。‎ ‎     To make it easier, I suggest you study and get some knowledge of the Tang dynasty in advance.——作答示例 ‎    最后嘱咐读唐诗之前最好了解一下唐朝的历史，再回应前文的important part of Chinese civilization，使文气圆润，使文章圆满。这里的in advance用得也比较自然，但问题是高考环境下考生是否还能想起，不能想起的话，before怎么使用？ahead of time怎么使用？‎ ‎ ‎ 高考阅卷现场评分五个档位的样卷 ‎1. 第五档23 分（21-25），共138词。‎ How is everything going? I hope you have practiced Chinese fluently.‎ Having known the arrangements of your time, I’m writing to tell you that the next class we will have is at 8 am, this Sunday. What’s more, to make our lesson more interesting, it will be arranged at jiefang Park. Because as far as I’m concerned, a quiet place can not only make you feel relaxed, but also improve the speed of learning. Besides, the context of the next class is about learning Tang poem. So, I hope you can read sow relevant books which is about the history of Tang dynasty before the class. An enough preparation will give you a magic experience of Chinese culture.‎ Above all, if you have any question or difficulty you can call me at 123456. Looking forward to your replay!‎ ‎2. 第四档 18 分（16-20），共109词。‎ I’m writing to tell you some plans that are involved with the next class.‎ First, you should remember the time and address well in order to make full preparations. The address is my house and time is 10 o'clock in the morning. In our next class we will learn Tang dynastic’s poetry. You see Li Bai and Dufu are really great poets of that time. So you should know Tang dynastic's history in advance. To be honest, the next class will be interesting. I am sure you will like it.‎ In conclusion, I hold the firm belief that you will make greater progress.‎ I’m looking forward to your coming.‎ ‎3. 第三档13分（11-15），共133词。‎ I am LiHua. I still teach Chinese for you. And you also studying hard. Now I want to set the time about next studying Chinese.‎ Next Sunday, I will teach you that TangShi in China. I think you will interested for it. TangShi is China favorit Culture. Long time ago, TangShi was loved. A lot of Chinese all loved TangShi and Some Students Could write it.‎ I will teach you in the School on Sunday at afternoon. I hope you Can look for about TangChao history because it can help you learn TangShi. I think you are interested in TangShi because it is funny and full knowledge. Next class, I will teach you about TangShi and Some history about Tangchao. I hope you can like my teaching class and get lots of knowledge.‎ ‎ 4. 第二档 8分（6-10），共124词。‎ How surprised and excited to write the letter for you. I am your old friend Li Hua. My country is very old, and Chinese culture is very secret and beautiful.‎ It’s said that China is one of Four Culture Old Country, and have various of culture about history. As Tang Chao, this is a vividly time for China history. If you want like a duck to water in the class. You will to prepare many history. We will study Tang poem in the class10 and at the next weekend, that day 2 pm. I hope you don’t comelate.‎ At the moment, you will practice your Chinese and find many important information.‎ I am thanks for you reward this letter! See you again!‎ ‎5. 第一档 3 分（1-5）共95词。‎ My name is LIHUA. Yeah! No matter your Chinese-teacher.‎ Last time my some told you still remember? Next time my plan teache you learning desty. I help you can airily know. Because China is have long history native.‎ Maybe Chinese for your have a little difficult.But china is beautiful you hard to know it. You will discover “China” don’t only larger more it this is rabit your will fall in love it.‎ My either want with you study my England friend my decide time tomorrow the afternoon. “PLACE” in school. Wait for you.‎ 附上高考阅卷各档次的给分范围和要求 第五档（21-25分）‎ 完全完成了试题规定的任务。‎ ‎—覆盖了所有内容要点。‎ ‎—应用了较丰富的语法结构和词汇。‎ ‎—语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致。‎ ‎—有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，全文结构紧凑。‎ 完全达到了预期的写作目的。‎ 第四档(16-20分)‎ 完成了试题规定的任务。‎ ‎—虽漏掉一两个次重点，但覆盖了所有主要内容。‎ ‎—应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。‎ ‎—语法结构与词汇应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。‎ ‎—应用简单的语句间的连接成分，全文结构较紧凑。‎ 达到了预期的写作目的。‎ 第三档（11-15分）‎ 基本完成了试题规定的任务。‎ ‎—虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容。。‎ ‎—应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。‎ ‎—有一些语法结构与词汇的错误，但不影响理解。‎ ‎—应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯。‎ 整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。‎ 第二档（6-10分）‎ 未恰当完成试题规定的任务。‎ ‎—漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容。‎ ‎—语法结构单调，词汇知识有限。‎ ‎—有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解。‎ ‎—较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性。‎ 信息未能清楚地传达给读者。‎ 第一档(1-5分)‎ 未完成试题规定的任务。‎ ‎—明显漏掉主要内容，写了一些无关内容，原因可能是未理解试题要求。‎ ‎—语法结构单调，应用知识有限。‎ ‎—较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响对写作内容的理解。‎ ‎—缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯。‎ 信息未能传达给读者。‎ ‎0分 未能传达给读者任何信息：内容太少，无法评判；写的内容均与所要求内容无关或所写内容无法看清。‎