2020届二轮复习经典写作分步实施指导之二：电子邮件

2020届二轮复习经典写作分步实施指导之二：电子邮件

‎2020届二轮复习 经典写作分步实施指导之四：电子邮件 ‎[试题]‎ 假定你是李华，想邀请你校留学生Jack和全班同学周六一起去Green Village感受美丽乡村。请给他写一封邮件，内容包括：‎ ‎1．乡村介绍；‎ ‎2．活动安排；‎ ‎3．往返时间、方式。‎ 注意：1.词数100左右；‎ ‎2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。‎ ‎[一]写作分步实施 第一步：准确审题，理行文脉络，拟写作要点 ‎1．审题：①文体：邀请信　②人称：主要是第一人称 ‎③时态：主要是一般现在时和一般将来时 ‎2．拟点：通过审题，根据题目和内容要求可以从以下三个方面来写作。‎ ‎①开头：自我介绍并点明写邮件的目的。(邀请对方参观)‎ ‎②主体：具体介绍乡村和参观活动的安排。(乡村的景色；村民友好；参观博物馆)‎ ‎③结尾：往返时间、方式。‎ 要点1：我是李华。我写信是想邀请你去Green Village游览。‎ I’m_Li_Hua._I’m_writing_to_invite_you_to_visit_Green_Village.‎ 要点2－①：Green Village被绿色的田野和茂密的森林所包围。‎ Green_Village_is_surrounded_by_green_fields_and_thick_forests.‎ 要点2－②：村民们很友好。‎ The_villagers_are_friendly.‎ 要点2－③：我们将花两个小时参观当地的博物馆。(explore)‎ We’re_going_to_spend_two_hours_exploring_the_local_museum.‎ 要点3：我们计划在本周六上午九点乘公共汽车去那儿，下午返回。‎ We_will_go_there_by_bus_at_9_a．m._this_Saturday_and_we_will_come_back_in_the_afternoon.‎ 第二步：添加细节，文意更丰满，表达更亮眼 为了使行文连贯、满足词数要求，我们需要补充一些要点和添加细节。例如：‎ ‎1．要点1可添加同位语“这是本地区一个迷人的村庄”；‎ ‎2．要点2－①可添加对Green Village 的具体介绍(距离市中心的距离)；‎ ‎3．要点2－②可添加村民们友好的表现(热情好客)；‎ ‎4．要点2－③可添加参观当地博物馆的目的(了解村庄历史)；‎ ‎5．要点3可添加细节，说明具体的集合地点。‎ ‎6．结尾可增加“如果你愿意参加，请给我发邮件”作结束语。‎ 拓展要点1：我是李华。我写信是想邀请你去Green Village游览，这是本地区一个迷人的村庄。 (同位语， charming)‎ I’m_Li_Hua.I’m_writing_to_invite_you_to_visit_Green_Village,_a_charming_village_in_this_area.‎ 拓展要点2－①：距离市中心大约5英里，Green Village被绿色的田野和茂密的森林所包围。‎ About_five_miles_from_downtown,_‎ Green_Village_is_surrounded_by_green_fields_and_thick_forests.‎ 拓展要点2－②：村民们很友好，他们总是热情地欢迎游客。(并列句， enthusiastic)‎ The_villagers_are_friendly_and_they_always_give_visitors_an_enthusiastic_welcome.‎ 拓展要点2－③：我们将花两个小时参观当地的博物馆，这将是一个了解这个村庄悠久历史的机会。 (定语从句)‎ We’re_going_to_spend_two_hours_exploring_the_local_museum,_which_will_be_an_opportunity_to_learn_about_the_long_history_of_the_village.‎ 拓展要点3：我们计划在本周六上午九点在校门口集合，然后乘公共汽车去那儿。我们将会在下午返回。(并列谓语动词)‎ We_plan_to_meet_at_the_school_gate_at_9_a．m.this_Saturday_and_then_go_there_by_bus.We_will_come_back_in_the_afternoon.‎ 增加结束语：如果你愿意参加，请给我发邮件。‎ If_you’d_like_to_join,_please_email_me_soon.‎ 第三步：连句成文，排语句顺序，重衔接过渡 本写作可采用总分式结构组织全文。可用过渡句“Here’s a look at it”引出下文对乡村和本次活动安排的介绍；用“After that, we shall travel through the village by ourselves”充实活动安排，避免内容空洞。然后根据要点间的逻辑关系连句成文。‎ ‎[参考范文]‎ Dear_Jack，‎ I’m_Li_Hua.I’m_writing_to_invite_you_to_visit_Green_Village,_a_charming_village_in_this_area.Here’s_a_look_at_it.‎ About_five_miles_from_downtown,_Green_Village_is_surrounded_by_green_fields_and_thick_forests.The_villagers_are_friendly_and_they_always_give_visitors_an_enthusiastic_welcome.We’re_going_to_spend_two_hours_exploring_the_local_museum,_which_will_be_an_opportunity_to_learn_about_the_long_history_of_the_village.After_that,_we_shall_travel_through_the_village_by_ourselves.‎ We_plan_to_meet_at_the_school_gate_at_9_a．m.this_Saturday_and_then_go_there_by_bus.We_will_come_back_in_the_afternoon.If_you’d_like_to_join,_please_email_me_soon.‎ Yours，‎ Li_Hua 训练材料：高级词汇和复杂句型运用 ‎1．(2015•全国卷Ⅱ书面表达) 所以我和我的同学决定为他们组织一些精彩的歌舞表演，这将持续大约1个小时。(determine, organize)‎ So_my_classmates_and_I_have_determined_to_organize_some_wonderful_singing_and_dancing_performances_for_them,_which_will_last_about_one_hour.‎ ‎2．(2015•浙江高考书面表达)我的大多数同学想去公园，而我有一个想去一个更好的地方的想法。最后，我设法说服了我的同学接纳了我的想法。(finally, persuade)‎ Most_of_my_classmates_wanted_to_go_to_a_park_while_I_had_an_idea_of_going_to_a_nicer_place._Finally,_I_managed_to_persuade_my_classmates_into_accepting_my_idea.‎ ‎3．在被说服改变态度之后，我终于找到了正确的方法来改掉粗心大意，也获得了信心。‎ Having been persuaded to change my attitude, I finally got the right way to rid myself of ‎ carelessness and gained confidence as well.‎ ‎4．(2017•天津高考书面表达)I’m determined to perform well in the final exam, so I’m occupied in preparing for it.‎ ‎→Determined to perform well in the final exam, I’m occupied in preparing for it.(用分词作状语) 高考中常把determined to do sth.作状语的用法作为考查点，有类似用法的还有lost in, caught in, absorbed in等。‎ ‎5． (2015•福建高考书面表达)决心努力学习，他在墙上挖了洞从邻居家“偷”光为的是晚上读书。‎ Determined to study hard, he bored a hole in the wall to “steal” light from his neighbor to read at night.‎ ‎6．(2017•北京高考书面表达)在我看来，我更喜欢长江之旅，长江是中国最长的河流，也是孕育中国文明的河流之一。‎ In my view/From my point of view, I prefer the tour along the Yangtze River, the longest river in China and one of the mother rivers of Chinese civilization.‎ ‎7．Although she didn’t know the best way of getting to places, she insisted_that_she_organize the trip properly.‎ 尽管她对去某些地方的最佳路线并不清楚，她却坚持要自己把这次旅行安排得尽善尽美。‎ ‎8．When I told her the_air_would_be_hard_to_breathe and it would be very cold, she said it would be an interesting experience.当我告诉她那里空气稀薄，呼吸会困难而且天气很冷时，她却说这将是一次有趣的经历。‎ ‎9．一个意志力坚定的人总是努力完成工作，不管它有多么艰难。‎ A determined person always tries to finish the job, no matter how hard it is.‎ ‎10．我们的腿又沉又冷以至于摸起来像冰块一样。‎ Our legs were so heavy and cold that they felt like blocks of ice.‎ ‎11．(2015•陕西高考书面表达)I’m very strong and healthy and I like (＝am_fond_of ) dancing and singing.(用本单元短语替换加黑词)‎ ‎12．(2014•山东高考写作)Thinking of my dream that I would become a teacher in the future, I decided (＝made up my mind) to take the exam again.(用本单元短语替换加黑词)‎ ‎13．(2014•安徽高考书面表达)塑造我们生活的不是我们偶尔遇到的困难，而是我们面对困难的态度。(强调句型)‎ It’s not what difficulties we meet once in a while that shapes our lives, but what attitudes we take to face them.‎ ‎14．(2016•天津高考书面表达)你们是如此的善良和体贴，无论你们在哪里，我们都希望和你们成为朋友。(so ... that ...; no matter)‎ You are so kind and considerate that we hope to be friends with you no matter where you are. ‎ ‎15．这段经历告诉我，除了在生活中目标高远，我们也应该关心每一件小事，因为它们使我们的成功成为可能。‎ This experience has taught me that, as well as aiming high in life, we should also care about every small thing, because they are what make our success possible.‎ ‎16．(2015•湖南高考写作)同时，我下定决心更加努力学习而不是把宝贵的时间浪费在那些无用的事情上。‎ At the same time, I made up my mind to study harder rather than waste precious time on those useless things.‎ ‎16．(2016•北京高考书面表达)那个周末，我们去了附近的一个社区并把它们捐赠给那里的 人们。‎ That weekend, we went to a nearby neighborhood and gave them away to the people there.‎ ‎17. (2017•天津高考书面表达)The teacher insisted that every minute (should) be made full use of to do the work well.(要点句)‎ ‎18. (2016•四川高考书面表达)Among the four seasons in a year, summer is my favorite. The morning air is so good to breathe.(开头句)‎ ‎19. 故宫位于北京市中心，是中国从明朝中期到清朝末期的中国帝王宫殿。(形容词短语作状语)‎ Located_in_the_center_of_Beijing,_the_Forbidden_City_was_the_Chinese_imperial_palace_from_the_midMing_Dynasty_to_the_end_of_the_Qing_Dynasty.‎ ‎20. 人们普遍认为中国将肯定会在世界上发挥越来越重要的作用。(It be＋过去分词＋that)‎ It_is_widely_believed_that China will certainly play a more and more important part in the world.‎