2020届二轮复习经典写作分步实施指导之八：咨询信件

2020届二轮复习经典写作分步实施指导之八：咨询信件

‎2020届二轮复习 经典写作分步实施指导之八：咨询信件 ‎[试题]‎ 假定你是李华，你从电视新闻上得知你的美国朋友汤姆所在的城市发生了地震。请你给汤姆写一封信，内容包括：‎ ‎1．对朋友汤姆及其家人表示关切；‎ ‎2．得知该地震造成的后果感到很难过；‎ ‎3．询问汤姆及其家人是否安好；‎ ‎4．愿意尽最大努力提供帮助。‎ 注意：1.词数100左右；‎ ‎2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。‎ ‎[一]写作分步实施 第一步：准确审题，理行文脉络，拟写作要点 ‎1．审题：①文体：普通信件　②人称：主要是第一、二人称 ‎③时态：主要是一般现在时和一般过去时 ‎2．拟点：通过研读题目，根据写作背景介绍和内容要求可以从以下三个方面来写作。‎ ‎①开头：得知地震消息并表达对朋友的关切之情。‎ ‎②主体：得知该地震造成的后果的心情；询问汤姆及其家人是否安好。‎ ‎③结尾：安慰朋友并表示愿意尽最大努力提供帮助。‎ 要点1：我得知你们城市发生了一场可怕的地震。我真的很担心你和你的家人。‎ I_learned_that_a_terrible_earthquake_happened_in_your_city.I_am_really_concerned_about_you_and_your_family.‎ 要点2－①：我听到这场灾难感到很难过。‎ I’m_so_sorry_to_hear_about_the_disaster.‎ 要点2－②：请告诉我你现在的生活是什么样的。‎ Please_tell_me_what_your_life_is_like_now.‎ 要点2－③：我希望你的家人都没有受伤。‎ I_hope_that_none_of_your_family_members_were_injured.‎ 要点3－①：请不要担心，一切都会好的。‎ Please_don’t_be_worried.Everything_will_be_fine.‎ 要点3－②：如果你需要帮助，请让我知道。‎ If_you_need_any_help,_please_let_me_know.‎ 要点3－③：我会尽我所能帮助你。‎ I_will_do_what_I_can_to_help_you.‎ 第二步：添加细节，文意更丰满，表达更亮眼 为了使行文连贯、满足词数要求，使句子更丰满，我们需要添加细节或使用一些高级表达以增加亮点。例如：‎ ‎1．在要点1中添加时间状语“当我观看电视新闻时”；‎ ‎2．对于要点2－①，可增加地震导致的具体后果(伤亡人数、受损程度)；‎ ‎3．在要点3－③中增加介词短语“作为你最好的朋友之一”，使朋友感受到你的真诚和温暖。‎ 拓展要点1：当我观看电视新闻时得知你们城市发生了一场可怕的地震。我真的很担心你和你的家人。 (时间状语从句)‎ When_I_watched_the_news_on_TV,_I_learned_that_a_terrible_earthquake_happened_in_your ‎_city.I_am_really_concerned_about_you_and_your_family.‎ 拓展要点2－①：我听到这场灾难感到很难过，它造成6人死亡，500多人受伤，29人失踪，200多所房屋倒塌。 (定语从句，并列句， fall down)‎ I’m_so_sorry_to_hear_about_the_disaster,_which_caused_six_deaths_and_left_more_than_five_hundred_persons_injured.29_persons_were_missing_and_over_200_houses_fell_down.‎ 拓展要点3－③：作为你最好的朋友之一，我会尽我所能帮助你。(介词短语)‎ As_one_of_your_best_friends,_I_will_do_what_I_can_to_help_you.‎ 第三步：连句成文，排语句顺序，重衔接过渡 本写作采用三段式结构组织全文。可用“How are you doing？”开头，用what’s more作好文章的衔接过渡，最后用Best wishes！表达美好祝愿。‎ ‎[参考范文]‎ Dear_Tom，‎ How_are_you_doing?_When_I_watched_the_news_on_TV,_I_learned_that_a_terrible_earthquake_happened_in_your_city.I_am_really_concerned_about_you_and_your_family.‎ I’m_so_sorry_to_hear_about_the_disaster,_which_caused_six_deaths_and_left_more_than_five_hundred_persons_injured.What’s_more,_29_persons_were_missing_and_over_200_houses_fell_down.Please_tell_me_what_your_life_is_like_now.I_hope_that_none_of_your_family_members_were_injured.‎ Please_don’t_be_worried.Everything_will_be_fine.If_you_need_any_help,_please_let_me_know.As_one_of_your_best_friends,_I_will_do_what_I_can_to_help_you.‎ Best_wishes!‎ Yours_sincerely，‎ Li_Hua 训练材料：高级词汇和复杂句型运用 ‎1．(2014•北京高考书面表达)但现在，由于我的左脚在足球比赛中受伤了，所以我不能按计划和你一起去。我写信真诚地向你表达我的歉意。(injure, express, sincerely)‎ But_now,_because_my_left_foot_was_injured_in_the_football_game,_I_cannot_go_with_you_as_planned._I’m_writing_to_sincerely_express_my_apology_to_you.‎ ‎2．(2014•湖南高考写作)当一个心怀恶意的人攻击我们的时候，我们不会感到害怕，因为我们可以电击他，从而逃离危险。(frightened, shock)‎ When_a_man_with_an_evil_intention_attacks_us,_we_won’t_feel_frightened_because_we_can_give_him_an_electric_shock_and_escape_from_danger.‎ ‎3．听到这，全班哄堂大笑，我同桌的脸变红了。‎ Hearing_this,_the_whole_class_burst_into_laughter/burst_out_laughing_and_my_deskmate’s_face_turned_red.‎ ‎4．(2017•天津高考书面表达)虽然这些天我埋头读书，但我还是加入了几个学生俱乐部以提高自己。‎ Though buried in books these days, I have still joined several student clubs in order to improve myself.‎ ‎5．(2017•江苏高考书面表达)我认为，电影市场在不久的将来会低迷。‎ As far as I can judge, the film market may witness a slowdown in the near future.‎ ‎6．(2016•北京高考书面表达)我们为自己感到骄傲，相信我们可以为更美好的世界做更多的事。(proud)‎ We are proud of ourselves and believe we can do more for a better world.‎ ‎7．(2014•福建高考书面表达)这辆自行车似乎太重了，很难控制。更糟糕的是，我从自行车上摔下来很多次。(too ...to ...)‎ The bike seemed too heavy and difficult to control. Worse still, I took many falls off the bike. ‎ ‎8．(2014•山东高考写作)这句谚语提醒了我，通往成功的道路并不总是一帆风顺。 (部分否定)‎ The proverb reminded me that the path to success was not always smooth.‎ ‎9．我听说我们学校的图书馆正计划购置一批新书，所以我写信推荐一些书。‎ I’ve heard that our school library is planning to buy a number of new books, so I am writing to recommend some books.‎ ‎10．(2018•浙江高考写作)Dad proposed that we should walk along the river which may lead us to the farm house and nothing seemed better than that.(要点句)‎ ‎11. The old man was lying on the ground as if he was badly hurt.(状语从句的省略)‎ ‎→The old man was lying on the ground as if badly hurt.‎ ‎12. All body language doesn’t mean the same thing in different countries, such as nodding. (变为同义句)‎ ‎→Not_all_body_language_means_the_same_thing_in_different_countries,_such as nodding.‎ ‎13. A recent survey shows that not all the students in our school take physical exercise in their spare time.(开头句)‎ ‎14. Everything in my childhood crowded upon my mind as if they had just happened.(要点句)‎ ‎15. (2015•广东高考写作)The less the teacher does, the more the students do and the more they will learn.Finally they will become active learners rather than passive ones. In_the_end