2018二轮复习如何提高作文的档次课件（24张）

2018二轮复习如何提高作文的档次课件（24张）

如何提高作文的档次 How to improve your writing The Award Ceremony The Best-looking Award 最佳颜值奖 史雨晴 The Best-word Award 最美词汇奖 孙 梦 The Best-sentence Award 最美句式奖 焦彤彤 The Best-structure Award 最优结构奖 时亚楠 “ 五档 ” 作文在眼里 --- 抓标准 1. 完成了试题 规定的任务 ； 2. 覆盖了所有内容 要点 ； 3. 应用了较多的 语法结构 和 词汇 ； 4. 具备了较强的语言运用能力； 5. 有效地使用了语言间的 连接成分 ，使全文 结构紧凑 ； 6. 完全达到了预期的写作目的。 （ 21- 25 分） STEP1 ：确定文章框架，包括： 时态、语态、格式、展开方式、开头结尾 等。 STEP2 ：确定内容 要点 ，包括：主要人物、时间地点、重要细节、合理发挥等。 STEP3 ：正式开始写作，整理思路成篇， 行文连贯 。 STEP4 ：检查全文，主要 检查语法 以及 粗心 犯下的 错误 。 高考英语作文完美行文四步骤 “ 五档 ” 作文在眼里 --- 抓标准 1. 完成了试题 规定的任务 ； 2. 覆盖了所有内容 要点 ； 3. 应用了较多的 语法结构 和 词汇 ； 4. 具备了较强的语言运用能力； 5. 有效地使用了语言间的 连接成分 ，使全文 结构紧凑 ； 6. 完全达到了预期的写作目的。 （ 21- 25 分） 3. 使用恰当的连接词 2. 使用较丰富的句式 三要素 1. 使用较高级的词汇 高考作文标准 词性多样、词汇高级、短语丰富 简单句、并列句、复合句、倒装句、强调句、非谓语、 with 复合结构等 段与段、句与句之间层次分明、条理清楚 假如你班将举行一次以 “ Who I want to thank most ” 为主题的班会。请你就此话题写一篇发言稿。写作要点： 1. 谁是你最想感谢的人； 2. 举例说明原因； 3. 表达你对他 / 她的感谢和祝福 。 注意： 1. 词数 100 词左右，可适当增加细节 以使行文连贯 ； 2. 文章开头和结尾已给出不计入总词数。 Hello,everyone, ...... Thank you for your listening ！ 题目再现 语态和时态错用 纠错与润色 -- 词法 When I was a little girl, she has been given up her free time on weekends to accompany me. She always smile and never give up anything. gave up When I was young, she devoted all her free time to taking care of me. smiles gives She is optimistic and determined. 谓语动词三单错误 纠错与润色 -- 词法 Let me tell you the people who I want to thank most is my mother. I hope they can have a good health. person In my opinion, the person I want to thank most is my mother. 名词单复数误用 a healthy body 可数与不可数混用 I wish them good health and happiness every day. 纠错与润色 -- 词法 I consider that it was my mom's sincerely heart that moved completely. sincere I believe that it was my mom's sincerity that moved me completely. 形容词与副词错用 汉式英文 : sincere heart 纠错与润色 -- 词法 Hearing her words, I felt relief. They give all their love to me, so I very appreciate to them. What a relief it was to hear what she said. 词性 的错用 relieved am very grateful/ thankful 近义词和词性的错用 With all their love given to me, they deserve my appreciation. ( ) 纠错与润色 -- 句法 No matter how mistakes I made, they would forgive me. I can never forget she told me that the only wish in her heart is I love life and keep happy every day. what They would forgive me for whatever mistakes I made. 引导词误用 that 从句缺少引导词 &不够简洁 I was told to love life and keep happy every day, which is also her only wish. 纠错与润色 -- 句法 He has told me what can I do and what should I do. They give me my life, they make me know I should thank those who are kind to me. I can He has helped me to find out who I am and what I want . 从句语序错用 and 逗号当连词误用 They give me my life and make me know I am supposed to thank whoever is kind to me . I should 句与句之间缺少连接词 纠错与润色 -- 行文逻辑 They do not have much knowledge. They not only gave me love but also taught me many lessons about life. In spite of the fact that they do not have much knowledge, they show me love and help me understand lots of life philosophy . Hello, everyone, Who I want to thank most? The first person who comes into my mind is our head teacher. He was always concerned about us and did many beneficial things for us. For example…. I can’t forget him. Best wishes to his health and happiness. 纠错与润色 -- 行文逻辑 段与段之间过渡不自然 Today, it’s a great honor to give a speech here. When it comes to the topic who I want to thank most, the first person who comes into my mind is our head teacher, who is always concerned about us and does many things for us…. To sum up, I will never forget him. Best wishes to his health and happiness. 标 准 Yes/No 亮点举例 / 错误改正 1. 结构 段落合理 主题鲜明 衔接自然 2. 内容 要点全面 拓展合理 3. 语言 词汇丰富 句法正确 4. 卷面 书写工整 送给这位同学的 建议和激励语 Groupwork-- 评一评 不能为了高级结构而忽略句子本身的 完整性 、 简洁性 和 连贯性 。 Hello, everyone, Based on the topic of the class meeting, I take the opportunity to show my gratitude to the person who I want to thank most . He is one of my teachers. Here are the reasons . He not only spreads knowledge, but also always takes care of our health. I can clearly remember I had terrible grades before he came to teach us. However, with his help, I have made great progress and fall in love with my studies. What’s more , I was once seriously ill, it was he who sent me to the hospital and looked after me till I completely recovered . That’s why I am so grateful t o him. Here, I want to thank him again and wish my teacher all the best with his work and life. Thanks for your listening. My correction Hello, everyone, There are many people we want to express our thanks to , but now who I want to thank most is my English teacher, Mr Zhang. Not only is he my teacher but also my friend after class. I can well remember that there was a time when I was upset because I failed in an important exam. It was he that encouraged and helped me. He told me not to lose heart and gave me some advice on learning English. Then gradually I fell in love with English. Without his help, I would never have made so much progress. So today, I would like to convey my sincere thanks to Mr Zhang. And I wish him good health . Thank you for your listening! 范文赏析 Homework 参照本节课所学内容将自己的作文进行修改、润色。课下重新抄写并上交。 背诵范文