高考英语试题分类汇编书面表达Word版含解析

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高考英语试题分类汇编书面表达Word版含解析

2013 年高考英语试卷分类汇编之书面表达 2013 年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试【安徽卷】 第二节 书面表达(满分 25 分) 假设你校英语社团举办以“讲求文明,从我做起”为主题的征文活动,请你以“On the Way to School”为 题,写一篇英语短文。 内容主要包括: 1.遵守交通法规; 2.注意举止文明。 注意: 1.词数 120左右; 2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯; 3.短文中不能出现与本人相关的信息; 4.短文的题目已为你拟好,不计入总词数 题型分析 2013 年安徽高考作文,属于提纲式要点作文,话题为:讲文明从我做起。要求学生写一篇短文,叙 述自己上学途中文明的行为举止。这个话题体现了实用性、生活性的原则,贴近学生的生活和学习,为考 生所熟知。提纲类书面表达不是简单的逐条翻译,而是将所给的几个要点合理的组成比较通顺的语句,因 此要仔细组织语言,合理安排结构。在语言方面,要特别注意简洁明了,开头要开门见山。 审题要素 写作时应注意下面几点: (1)注意人称,应该用第一人称。 (2)注意时态的正确使用:根据试题的内容要求,本文用一般现在时和一般将来时。 (3)注意恰当使用逻辑词语,使各个要点间逻辑连贯,行文通顺。 思路导引 首段,引入话题 — 发生在身边的不文明现在,从我做起(start from my self)。 其次,上学途中应该怎么做到文明:遵守交规;个人举止。(obey the traffic rules; behave politely) 最后,总结并提出呼吁。(appeal to everyone to…) 标准范文 On the way to School These days, breaking traffic rules and littering are not uncommon, causing serious harm to life and the environment. Changing this situation requires considerable effort on the part of everyone. As for me, it should start on my way to school. I will keep traffic rules in mind all the way. If I ride a bike, I’ll always keep to the right and never cross a road until the traffic light turns green. If I walk, I’ll never forget to use the pedestrian crossing. Meanwhile, I will regard it as my duty to help keep our environment clean and healthy. Not only will I keep from littering and spitting anywhere, I will also help clean up the roadside litter whenever possible. I hope my behavior will make a difference. 赏析:本文要点齐全,层次清晰, 表达地道,并使用相应的高级句型和高级词汇,不失为一篇佳作。 重点短语 Cause harm to 造成危害;As for… 就…而言;keep… in mind 牢记在心;keep to the right 靠右;the pedestrian crossing 人行横道;regard … as my duty… 把…看做职责;make a difference 有作用;有影响。 高级句型 causing serious harm to…非谓语动词作结果状语。 If …条件从句。 I will regard it as my duty to…it 作形式宾语,指代动词不定式 to help keep…。 Not only… but also 结构。 2013 年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试【北京卷】 第二节 开放作文(15 分) 请根据下面提示。写一篇作文。词数不少于 50. You are discussing the following picture with your English friend Jim. Now you are telling him how you understand the picture and what makes you think so. 审题要素 写作时应注意下面几点: (1)注意人称:应该用第一人称阐述自己的看法,描述图片应用第三人称。 (2)注意时态的正确使用:漫画的描述以及自己观点的陈述都用一般现在时。 (3)要用简洁的语言概括出漫画的主要内容,并理解隐藏在漫画中的寓意,从而阐明自己的看法。 (4)注意恰当使用连接词,使行文通顺。 思路导引 首先,简述图画表达的寓意。(difference; dream/wish; reality) 其次,结合图画内容发表自己的看法。(face; catch a small fish; learn to accept; keep on doing; realize one’s dream) 标准范文 I think the picture is telling us that there is usually a difference between one’s dream and reality. People need to learn to face it. Everyone has his dream. However, it is not so easy for people to realize their dream every time. Just like the man in the picture, instead of the big fish he wishes for, he actually catches a small one. In my opinion, people need to learn to accept the reality and keep on trying. With another try, they may gain what they dream of. 2013 年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试【福建卷】 第二节书面表达(满分 25 分) 孩子的成长和教育是社会热议的话题,现今父母包揽一切、孩子过度依赖等现象十分严重。请阅读下面 的 漫画,按要求用英文写一篇短文。 内容要求: 1.描述漫画内容; 2. 分析漫画所揭示的问题; 3. 提出你的看法。 注意: 1.短文开头已给出,不计入总词数; 2.考生可适当发挥,使文章内容充实、连贯; 3.词数 120 左右; 4. 文中不能出现考生的具体信息。 参考词汇:pave the way From the picture, we can see a family of three walking on a long red carpet. _______________________________ 题型分析 这是一篇看图写作题,是高考英语写作中对考生来说相对比较难的一题。它主要考查考生综合运用语 言的能力,要求考生通过观察和分析单幅或一组画,把图画内容转化成文字信息。但是,它并不是要求考 生按照试题里的“提示”进行逐句翻译,而是要求考生在充分领会“提示”的前提下,用自己的语言写成一篇 内容充实、语言正确、句子连贯、用词贴切的作文。 审题要素 (1) 要认真审图 (2) 需从整体上把握图画所呈现的主要内容,处理好人物与时空及局部与整体的关系,找出文章的 线索或主题 (3) “丰满的想象+变化的表达” 思路导引 第一段:描述漫画:描述这幅图所要呈现的内容 第二段:揭示画旨:分析漫画所揭示的问题 第三段:发表看法:提出自己的看法 标准范文 From the picture we can see a family of three walking on a long red carpet. The son, well dressed, waves proudly in the middle while the father behind bends forward to hold the jacket and the mother in front rolls out the carpet, sweating. It shows a common phenomenon nowadays that children are the focus of families, shouldering the hope of their parents. Parents arrange everything for their children and spare no effort to pave the way for their success. As a consequence, children become so reliant on their parents that they have no independent thought or creative ideas. Such a situation is of great concern. In my opinion, overprotection and too much care are extremely bad for children's development. Instead of doing everything for them, parents should encourage their children to overcome difficulties and inspire them to develop by themselves. Only in this way can they grow up to be independent and become truly successful. 赏析: 重点短语 well dressed 穿着体面的;a common phenomenon 一种普遍现象; pave the way 为……铺平道路,为……做准备;spare no effort 不遗 余力,不计代价; 高级句型 Only in this way can they……只有这样他们才能…… Ⅲ 写作(共两节,满分 40 分) 基础写作(共 1 小题;满分 15 分) 你接受了一项写作任务,要为英语校报写一篇时事快讯。 [写作内容] 请根据以下信息,写一篇关于移民火星的快讯 [写作要求] 只能用 5 个句子表达全部内容 [评分标准]、 句子结构准确,信息内容完整,篇章连贯。 试题分析 今年的基础写作任务主要呈现出以下几个特点: 一、话题上令人出奇不意。相比较前几年的话题,如运动项目介绍(2008)、近视和公共场所禁烟调查活 动(2009、2010)、图书和人物介绍(2011、2012),今年的基础写作话题跳离了生活性和实用性,呈现 出了多样性和开放性的命题趋势。 二、文体上稳中求变、更加灵活。命题形式为观点表述型,近似于 2009 年和 2010 年的调查报告类的阐述 型文章。至此,基础写作的文体主要为两种:介绍类文章(2011 年和 2012 年、2008 年)、阐述类文章(2009 和 2010 年为调查报告类、2013 年的观点表述类)。 三、信息要点上与往年基本相当:今年的基础写作任务信息要点为 8 个。据此,除 2007 年外,连续五年 信息要点基本保持在八至九个。这说明,合并句子的能力对于基础写作取得高分依旧起着至关重要的作用。 四、句子结构上:本次写作更加体现出了考查考生对于并列关系的信息的处理能力。要想取得高分,考生 应避免使用单一的并列句式,而应有意识地选用丰富的语法结构来处理并列关系信息,如非谓语结构、定 语从句、介词短语、平行结构等。总之,挖掘信息的逻辑关系、灵活并熟练使用高级语法结构对于基础写 作的备考依旧是至关重要的。 五、词汇上:本次写作依旧承续了历年基础写作任务较为书面的正式用语的特点,在注重基础词汇运用能 力的同时,对于考生的词汇积累与熟练运用的要求有增无减。在某种意义上可以说,要想在本次写作中得 高分,词汇运用上一定要出彩。重要词汇如:移民火星行动:Project of immigration to Mars;招募志愿者: recruit/ attract volunteers;从全球范围:worldwide/ from all over the world/ throughout the world/ around the world;申请志愿者条件:requests for volunteers;至少 18 岁:at least/ over 18 years old/ 18 years older and over/ only above 18 years old;做好(心理)准备: be wiling/ ready/ (mentally)prepared/ agreed to be;愿意 永远不再返回地球:never returning to the earth/ make a no-return trip (to Mars)/ be wiling/ ready/ prepared/ agreed to be the first permanents of Mars settlers/ habitants/ inhabitants;愿与他人保持良好的关系:be willing to keep a good/ harmonious relationship with others;火星上生活条件艰苦:harsh/ hostile living conditions on Mars; living conditions on Mars are harsh/ severe/ hostile;面临严寒气候、孤独和恐惧:be faced/ challenged with severely cold/ freezing weather, loneliness and fears 厌倦地球生活:be/ get tired of (living on) the earth;想体验火星生活:be/ feel eager to experience living (a life) on Mars; be/ feel eager to live a thrilling life on Mars;人类英雄:human beings heroes。 总之,基础写作作为广东省高考的亮点新题型,越来越走向成熟的命题趋势。在词汇方面,新高三学生们 在熟练使用基础写作词汇的同时,还应特别重视话题写作词汇量的积累。 审题要素 写作时应注意下面几点: (1)确定文章主题为:为移民火星招募志愿者的快讯; (2)时态与人称:以现在时态为主(一般时、将来时),将来时态为辅。人称为第三人称叙述。 (2)写作要点:写作内容为四大部分:第一部分介绍“移民火星”志愿者选拔活动。第二部分介绍志愿 者的条件。第三部分介绍专家的观点。第四部分介绍志愿者的观点。写作时可分别陈述,确保思路清晰、 结构明了有条理; (3)切忌照译,可适当地增加细节,恰当地使用连接过渡词,以使行文连贯。 (4)句型方面,为了用五个句子表达全部内容,复合句的使用依然是考查的重点。除此以外,还应注意 灵活运用介词短语、非谓语结构等高级句式来打造句子结构,使句子表达灵活的同时更加高级。 思路导引 在文章结构方面,一定要紧扣考题已给出的写作提示:1.志愿者的选拔;2.志愿者的(申请)条件;3. 专 家观点;4. 志愿者观点。本次写作内容也就是以上的四大部分。 基本写作要求考生用 5 句话来写出,这就要求考生首先结合各信息要点的逻辑将信息分为五组,并选用适 当的结构来分别表达出来。本次基础写作信息分组相对比较容易,四大写作内容,可以考虑将其中一个写 作部分分为两个信息组,即用两个句子来表达一个写作部分。这里将第四个写作部分“志愿者的两个观点” 分为两句话进行陈述。至此,正好为五句话。 词汇与句式方面:词汇与句式的处理(见上述分析内容) (备选) 首先,阅读命题要求,确定主题、明确写作内容,并确定时态与人称(写作角度人称)。 其次,进行构思:主要为整理信息、划分要点(信息分组)、确定重要词汇(如上),然后进行连词成句, 并注意投放关键语法结构,原则是:灵活使用、使句式呈现多样化与高级化。 最后,连句成篇、适当调整表达与结构、注意句与句之间的连贯。 本次基础写作的信息分组比较容易,可以考虑将其中一个写作部分分为两个信息组,即使用一个句子来表 达即可。这里将第四个写作部分“志愿者的两个观点”分成两句话进行陈述。 2013 年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试【湖北卷】 第二节:短文写作(共 1 题;满分 30 分) 请根据以下提示,并结合事例,用英语写一篇短文。 We all know that“sticks and stones may break our bones”, but we should also be aware that words can hurt people, too. 注意:①无须写标题,不得照抄英语提示语; ②除诗歌外,文体不限; ③文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称; ④词数为 120 左右。 题型分析 2013 年湖北高考英语作文形式仍然同去年一样,属于开放式作文,要求学生结合生活中的一个事例,根据 所给的英语提示,写一篇话题作文,体现了英语学习应该注意实用性、生活性的原则。这种“开放式”的论 述文的命题形式给考生很大的自由发挥空间,对写作的布局谋篇提出了较高要求,要求考生既要会发表观 点认识,又要会进行描写叙述。这种写作命题有利于立体考查学生的语言知识、创新思维能力和价值观, 具有较强的选拔功能;因此要仔细组织语言,合理安排结构。在语言方面,要特别注意简洁明了,开头要 开门见山,点出主旨。 审题要素 写作时应注意下面几点: 一、 读“提示语”,锁定写作“话题” 英文提示语其实是让学生在英文语境中选择一个恰如其分的话题,所以读懂提示语,选择合适的话题 是写作的关键。写作要围绕 words can hurt people 进行,写作时要做到“观点”和“事例”的统一性、互衬性。 二、 拟定提纲,按照规律行文写作 可采用三段式结构,即引言(introduction)——主体(body)——结尾(conclusion)。引言部分通常引题即可, 然后在限定的范围内组织要点,完成主体部分和结尾部分。写作时要遵循以下规律: 1.开头部分 开头部分必须点题,用 2-3 个句子完成,其中要有一个漂亮的过渡句。 2.主体部分 主体部分其实是让学生用言简意赅的语言叙述一个结构完整、思想意义饱满的事例。注意所讲的事例一 定要能突出话题的中心,可用 8—10 个句子完成。 3.结尾部分 结尾部分要用概括性的语言来总结全文主题,得出结论,回归话题。其实,该部分就是在叙事的基础上 加以评论,是记叙文写作中的“小抒情”。 思路导引 首先,读懂提示语,sticks and stones may break our bones,words can hurt people, too.提炼写作的关键。 其次,结合事例说明主旨。 最后,点题说明 words can hurt people。 标准范文 My deskmate admires my fluent English very much and I usually feel encouraged by his compliments. One day, when we learned the new word “eccentric” in class, we were asked to make a sentence with it. I volunteered to do it by saying “My deskmate is an eccentric boy whose clothes never fit him.” Hearing this, the whole class burst into laughter and my deskmate’s face turned red. After class, I learned from the teacher that my deskmate would have dropped out of school if he hadn’t been helped by others. My mindless words must have hurt him deeply. Not until then did I realize words could be powerful in both positive and negative ways. We should avoid hurting others if we can’t always be encouraging when we speak. 赏析: 重点短语、词语 compliment n.赞美(话)[ pl.]问候 vt.赞美,恭维。make a sentence 造句,burst into laughter 突然大笑,drop out of school 退学,avoid doing sth 避免做某事,feel encouraged 感到鼓舞,mindless 无需动 脑的, 愚蠢的,eccentric a.古怪的,怪癖的,异乎寻常的,volunteer to do sth 志愿做某事。 重点、高级句型 1. My deskmate is an eccentric boy whose clothes never fit him 本 句是由 whose 引导的定语从句。 2. Hearing this, the whole class burst into laughter…本句使用了分 词做状语,hearing this… 3. …my deskmate would have dropped out of school if he hadn’t been helped by others.本句是由 if 引导的非真实条件句的虚拟 语气。 4. My mindless words must have hurt him deeply.本句用了 must have done 结构,表示对过去所发生事情的肯定猜测。 5. Not until then did I realize words could be powerful…本句使用 了部分倒装,增加了句式的多样性。 2013 年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试【湖南卷】 Section C (25 marks) Directions:Write an English composition according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 请以下词语为关键词写一篇英语短文。 mateh winner loser result 内容: 1.自己或他人的一次经历; 2.你的感受。 注意: 1.必须使用所给 4个关键词 2.词数不少于 120个; 3.不能使用真实姓名和学校名称。 题型分析 今年湖南的作文要求学生根据所给的四个词汇写一篇英语短文。短文第一个内容是关于自己或者他人的一 次经历,属于记叙部分;而第二点则要求学生谈谈自己的感受,应该是属于议论部分,因此,本篇作文是 “前叙后议”类。学生只要能抓住“比赛”“获胜者”“失败者”“结果”几个关键字眼就行,可以说这 样文章给学生发挥的空间很大。学生在第一段写经历的时候要注意进行适当的扩展,使叙事具有完整性。 表达自己的感受时要观点明确,积极向上,开门见山。 审题要素 写作时应注意下面几点: (1)注意第一段叙事的简洁性和完整性,不可过于简短也不可太过冗长。 (2)注意时态的正确使用:第一段叙述经历时要用过去时。第二段表达自己的感受时可能会用到过去时 和一般现在时。 (3)分段明确,语言简练。注意恰当使用过渡词、逻辑词语,使各个要点间逻辑连贯,行文通顺。 思路导引 首先,叙述经历。() 其次,谈自己的感受。(return books) 标准范文 Mrs. Wilson, I’m going out shopping, and won’t be back until about 5:00 pm. I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library. At about 1 o’clock this afternoon, Tracy called, saying that she couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee tomorrow morning as she has something important to attend to. She felt very sorry about that, but said that you could set some other time for the meeting. She wanted you to call her back as soon as you are home. She has already told Susan about this change. Li Hua 赏析: 重点短语 ask for help 求助;provide…for…给……提供……;be anxious to 急 切地要做 高级句型 But I have some difficulties with… and I have no idea of...但是我 再……有困难,我不知道…… 2013 年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试【江苏卷】 第五部分:书面表达(满分 25 分) 81.请根据你对以下两幅图的理解,以“Actions Speak Louder than Words”为题,用英语写一篇作 文。 参考词: banner (横幅) stump (树粧) 你的作文应包括以下内容: 1.简要描述两幅图的内容; 2.概述你对两幅图中不同做法的理解; 3.举例说明两幅图对你的启示。 注意: 1.可参照图片适当发挥; 2.作文词数 150 左右; 3.作文中不得提及有关考生个人身份的任何信息,如校名、人名等。 Actions Speak Louder than Words 作文 Actions Speak Louder than Words People celebrate Earth Day differently. In Picture 1, a man is trying to put up a banner on a lonely tree surrounded by stumps, but in vain, while Picture 2 shows a couple happily planting trees. The message conveyed here is clear: “Actions speak louder than words.” Our earth is suffering severe damage. Should we just pay lip service or take practical measures to protect it? The answer is definitely the latter. Immediate actions should be taken, like stopping cutting down trees, to better the environment. Actions are important in other fields, too. Instead of shouting empty slogans, it is more meaningful to donate books and sports goods to children in need. We should strictly and voluntarily follow traffic rules, stopping at the red light rather than complaining about traffic jams. Only when we match our words with actions can we make a difference in whatever we hope to accomplish. 名师点拨: 一、审题: 这是一篇看图写作题,是高考英语写作中对考生来说相对比较难的一题。它主要考查考生综合运用语言的 能力,要求考生通过观察和分析单幅或一组画,把图画内容转化成文字信息。但是,它并不是要求考生按 照试题里的“提示”进行逐句翻译,而是要求考生在充分领会“提示”的前提下,用自己的语言写成一篇内容 充实、语言正确、句子连贯、用词贴切的作文。 二、要点 第一段:描述图画:描述两幅图的内容 第二段:揭示画旨:概述你对两幅图中不同做法的理解 第三段:发表启示:举例说明图画给你的启示 三、赏析: 重点短语 put up a banner 竖起一面旗子;suffer severe damage 遭受严重破 坏;take practical measures 采取实际措施;better the environment 优化环境;donate books 捐赠书籍;follow traffic rules 遵守交通规 则 高级句型 Only when we……can we……只有当我们……时,我们才能…… 2013 年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试【江西卷】 第二节 书面表达(满分 25 分) 星光中学(Xingguang High School)近期举行了一次登山活动。假定你是学校英语报记者,请写一篇短 文,报道此次活动。内容包括: 1. 时间与地点:4 月 10 日,大青山(Daqing Mountain); 2. 活动的过程; 3. 你对于这次活动的评论。 注意: 1. 词数 120 左右。 2. 可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。 题型分析 江西卷的书面表达属于应用文写作,要求学生就一次登山活动写一篇新闻报道,是学生比较熟悉的题 材。报道类文章要条理清楚,语言简炼、突出重点。文章开头的第一段或第一句话要扼要地揭示出活动内 容。文章的主体部分要用充足的事实来展现活动的过程,最后对活动发表自己的评论。 审题要素 写作时应注意下面几点: (1)注意人称,应该用第一人称。 (2)注意时态的正确使用:以过去时为主。 (3)注意发挥想象力,详实叙述活动中发生的事情。。 思路导引 首先,交代活动的目的、参与者和时间、地点。(take exercise; take part in) 其次,叙述登山活动的过程。(gather; set out/off; enjoy; scenery; help each other; climb; reach; cheer) 最后,对活动进行评价。(benefit; get close to; relax; promote/ build up) 标准范文 In order to encourage the students to take outdoor exercise, our school organized a mountain-climbing on April 10. Hundreds of us took part in it. It was a nice day. At 8:00 am, we gathered at the foot of Daqing Moutain and set out for the top in high spirits. Al the way we were chatting, singing and laughing, enjoying the fresh air and the beautiful scenery. When some fell behind, others would come and offer help. About 2 hours later, we all reached the top. Bathed in sunshine, we jumped and cheered with joy. The activity benefited us a lot. Not only did it get us close to nature and give us relaxation from heavy school work, it also promoted the friendship among us. What a wonderful time ! 赏析: 重点短语 take outdoor exercise 户外锻炼;take part in 参加;参与;set out for 出发前往;fall behind 落后;get close to 靠近;接近; 高级句型 In order to..., our school organized... 为了...,我们学校组织了....(目 的状语) Not only did it..., it also promoted....它不仅...而且...(倒装句) 2013 年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试【辽宁卷】 第二节 书面表达(满分 25 分) —个英文网站面向中学生征稿请你写一篇英语稿件,介绍“中秋节”及这个 节日里的主要活动。 1. 写作要点:它是中国的传统节日之一; 2. 家人团聚; 3. 赏月、吃月饼; 4. 还有旅游、访友等其他活动。 注意:1.词数 100 左右; 2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯; 3. 开头语已为你写好,不计人总词数。 参考词汇:中秋节 the Mid-Autumn Festival 农历 lunar calendar 赏月 enjoy the full moon 月饼 moon cake 题型分析 2013 年辽宁的作文题,属于提纲式要点作文,要求学生就所给内容介绍中国的传统节日——中秋节, 这是学生比较熟悉的题材,体现了英语学习应该注意实用性、生活性的原则。提纲类书面表达不是简单的 逐条翻译,而是将所给的几个要点合理的组成比较通顺的语句,因此要仔细组织语言,合理安排结构。在 语言方面,要特别注意简洁明了,开头要直奔主题。 审题要素 写作时应注意下面几点: (1)注意人称,必要时应该用第一人称 we。 (2)注意时态的正确使用:从作文题目上可以看出全文主要使用一般现在时。 (3)使用尽可能多的语法结构和词汇。 (4)注意表述时,语言要简练、流畅,层次分明、清楚。 (5)有效使用语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑。 思路导引 首先,说明节日的日期。(fall, eighth month) 其次,说明节日的流行程度。(all over the country) 最后,节日这天的主要活动。(enjoy, eat, travel and visit) 标准范文 The Mid-Autumn Festival The Mid-Autumn Festival falls on the 15th of the eighth month of our Chinese lunar calendar. As one of the traditional Chinese festivals, it has been enjoying great popularity in our country. Usually, no matter how far away or how busy we are, we will try to come home for the celebration. The moon that night looks the brightest in the whole lunar month. What we love most is the time we enjoy the full moon together. With the beautiful moon up in the sky, we sit together and eat moon cakes and fruit, sharing our stories. In addition to these traditional activities, we have a wider range of choices such as traveling and visiting our relatives or friends. 赏析: 重点短语 enjoy great popularity 极受欢迎;with the beautiful moon up in the sky 一轮明月挂在空中; in addition to… 除了……;a wider range of choices 更广泛的选择 高级句型 no matter how … 不管多么……; what we love most is… 我们最喜欢的是…… 2013 年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试【山东卷】 第二节 写作(满分 30 分) 假如你是新华中学的学生李华,你的美国朋友 Tom 一周前给你发电子邮件,询问你暑假里的打算,但 你因准备期末考试未能及时回复。请根据双下要点给他回封邮件: 1. 未及时回信的原因; 2. 你假期的打算(如做兼职、旅行、做志愿者等) 注意:1. 词数:120-150; 2 可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。 写作: 【题型分析】 山东卷的作文题属于提纲式要点作文,要求学生就所给内容写一封信,是学生比较熟悉的题材,体现 了英语学习应该注意实用性,生活性的原则。提纲类书面表达不是简单的逐条翻译,而是将所给的几个要 点合理的组成比较通顺的语句,因此要仔细组织语言,合理安排结构。在语言方面,要特别注意简洁明了, 开头要开门见山。 【审题要素】 写作时应注意下面几点: (1)注意人称,应该用第一人称的形式给美国朋友 Tom 写信。 (2)注意时态的正确使用:从试题的内容上可以看出在表达要点 1 时应用过去时态;而要点 2 中的 几个方面则应该用一般将来时态。 (3)书信的格式正确,语言简练。 (4)注意恰当使用逻辑词语,使各个要点间逻辑连贯,行文通顺。 【思路导引】 首先,说明未及时回信的原因。(prepare for the final-term examination) 其次,告诉对方自己假期的打算(part-time job, travel, volunteer) 最后,欢迎 Tom 到中国玩(welcome to China) 【标准范文】 Dear Tom, How are you! To begin with, please accept my sincere apology for not replying to your last letter in time. During those days, I’d been busy preparing for the final exam which was very important to me. Now summer vacation is approaching, during which time I want to do many things, one of which is making a trip to some places of interest together with a few of my good friends, aiming to broaden our horizons. Additionally, being a volunteer is another thing I want to do, from which I can benefit a lot. At last, I’d like to do a part-time job, with the purpose of knowing more about society and, at the same time, I can earn some money, which can be called killing two birds with one stone. What do you think of my plan? Hope you could come to China in your spare time and have a wonderful time with us. Best wishes! Yours, sincerely 赏析: 重点短语 be busy doing 忙于做,make a trip to 到……去旅行,aim to do 旨在 做,broaden one’s horizon 开阔视野,benefit from 从……中收益, kill two bird with one stone 一举两得 高级句型 1. Now summer vacation is approaching, during which time I want to do many things, one of which is making a trip to some places of interest together with a few of my good friends, aiming to broaden our horizons.这是一很长的主从复合句,其中有两个非 限定性定语从句,一个分词做状语,增加了句子结构的复杂性。 2. Additionally, being a volunteer is another thing I want to do, from which I can benefit a lot.本句中,动名词做主语,其中有 一个定语从句,之后又跟了一个非限定性定语从句。 3. At last, I’d like to do a part-time job, with the purpose of knowing more about society and, at the same time, I can earn some money, which can be called killing two birds with one stone. 这是个并列句,前一个分句中,介词短语做状语,后 一个分句中,有一个非限定性定语从句,并且恰当的用到了一 个谚语。 2013 年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试【陕西卷】 第三节 书面表达(满分 30 分) 假定你是李华。请根据写作要点用英语写一篇周记,记述你周末帮助家人做家务的一次经历。 写作要点:1.做家务的理由;2.做家务的过程;3.你的感受。 注意: 1.短文词数不少于 100; 2.开头部分已写好,不计入总词数; 3.不能使用真实姓名和学校名称。 I am an 18-year-old middle school student, _________________________________________ 书面表达 题型分析 本篇作文是属于提纲式作文,要求学生用英语写一篇日记。内容为周末帮助家人做家务,这是学生比 较熟悉的题材,体现了英语学习应该注意实用性、生活性的原则。提纲类书面表达要求学生在写作时条理 清晰,将所给的几个要点适当展开,并合理的组成比较通顺的语句。写作中要仔细组织语言,合理安排结 构。在语言方面,首先要保证句子的正确,然后尽量使用一点高级词汇,适当的时候变换句式结构,使得 条理清晰,行文优美。 审题要素 写作时应注意下面几点: (1)注意人称,日记应该用第一人称来写。 (2)注意时态的正确使用:试卷要求记述周末的一次经历,所以应该用过去时。 (3)注意恰当使用逻辑词语,使各个要点间逻辑连贯,行文通顺。 思路导引 首先,说明做家务的理由。 其次,交代做家务的过程。 最后,谈谈你的感受。 以上各提纲自然成段,条理清晰。 标准范文 Possible Version: I’m an 18-year-old middle school student. I have been busy with my study and seldom helped my parents with the housework. Feeling quite sorry for that, I begin to think about what to do to help. Last Sunday, when my parents went out shopping, I suddenly got an idea: why not give the rooms a thorouhg cleaning? Firstly I collected all the books, newspapera and other things scattered in the rooms and put them in place. Then I wiped the dust off all the furniture. After that, I swept and mopped the floors. At this very moment, my parents came back and were quite surprised to see all the rooms tidy and floors shining. My mother gave me a hug and I could see satisfaction in her eyes. Tired I was, I never felt so happy. 赏析: 重点短语 be busy with… 忙于。。。 put them in place 把。。。放在固定地 方 wiped … off 檫去。。。 高级句型 Feeling quite sorry for that, I begin to think about what to do to help. (因为)感到非常抱歉,我开始想着怎么做来帮(父母)。 Tired I was, I never felt so happy. 尽管我很累,但我从没有(像这样)开心过。 2013 年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试【上海卷】 Ⅱ. Guided Writing Directions:Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given in Chinese. 上海博物馆拟举办一次名画展,现就展出场所(博物馆还是社区图书馆)征集公众意见,假设你是王 敏,给上海博物馆写一封信表达你的想法。你的信必须满足以下要求: 1.简述你写信的目的及你对场所的选择; 2. 说明你的理由(从便利性,专业性等方面对这两个场所进行对比) II. Guided Writing To whom it may concern: I’ve learned that you’re collecting suggestions on the location of the coming art exhibition. I know it makes a big difference to our city, such as promoting the image of Shanghai. I’m writing to share with you my opinions. In my view, it is more advisable to hold the art exhibition in Shanghai Museum than in community libraries. My reasons are as follows: Firstly, citizens will have easy access to it because Shanghai Museum which is located in the center of the city. Besides, it entitles people to a more comfortable environment for appreciating art. Secondly, with a reputation of being professional and experienced in holding art exhibitions, it is bound to live up to people’s expectations. Its professional security guards and advanced facilities can better protect those famous paintings from being damaged or stolen. I hope you can give a thought to my advice which I believe will help. Wang Min 名师点拨: 一、 审题与构思 本次高考作文考查观点论述,题型较为常见,要求对画展的展出场所做出选择,并且说明理由,而且已经 提示了可以从便利性和专业性两个角度来分析,难度不算太大,要写好这篇作文,只要观点明确并且言之 有理即可。 范文按照书信的形式,首先要提出给收信人,To whom it may concern 这里表示的是敬启者,是在读者身份 不明时用在信件、通知和证明书开头的套语,也是除了 Dear xxx之外英语书信的常见用语。 二、 成篇 信的第一段交待了自己的身份,并且表明了些这封信的目的。 第二段明确提出了自己的观点,用了 it is more advisable to do...句型,表明“……是更合理的”,常用在提 出建议时。段落最后用 My reasons are as follows.“我的理由如下”作为一个过渡句引出下面的理由论述。 第三、四段用 firstly, secondly “首先……;其次……”进行连接,层次清楚。在论述观点时连词的使用可 以使逻辑显得更清晰。第三段从便利性角度进行分析,博物馆交通更便利而且环境更舒适。第四段从专业 性角度说明博物馆的优势。 最后一段总结并重申自己的观点。 三、 好词好句 it is more advisable to………是更合理的 makes a big difference 有重大作用 have easy access to 更容易进入 entitle people to 使人有资格享用 with a reputation of 有……的荣誉 live up to 达到标准 be bound to 一定 give a thought to 考虑 2013 年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试【四川卷】 第三节 书面表达(共 35 分) 某中学生英文报近期开辟专栏,讨论学习习惯问题。请你结合自身学习实际,按以下提示,用英文为该 专栏写一篇稿件。 1. 说明学习习惯与学习效果之间的关系; 2. 介绍一种好的学习习惯并提出养成该习惯的建议; 3. 描述自己在学习习惯方面存在的某个问题并给出改进措施。 注意: 1. 词数 120 左右,开头语已为你写好; 2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文流畅; 3. 文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称。 It’s useful and necessary to discuss learning habits.____________________________________ 审题要素 写作时应注意下面几点: (1)注意人称,应该用第一人称介绍自己关于学习习惯的观点、建议、问题及改进措施。 (2)注意时态的正确使用:从试题的内容上本文以一般现在时为主。 (3)要点全面,语言简练,结构紧凑。 (4)注意恰当使用连接词,使行文通顺。 思路导引 首先,说明学习习惯和学习效果间的关系。(learning habits; learn efficiently; ) 其次,介绍一种好的学习习惯(如:及时复习)并提出养成该习惯的建议。(review regularly; develop/form the habit of...) 最后,描述自己在学习习惯方面存在的某个问题并给出改进措施。(have difficulty/trouble doing sth.; improve) 标准范文 It’s useful and necessary to discuss learning habits. As we all know, learning habits play a key role in our study. Only if we form a good learning habit, can we learn efficiently. Among learning habits, reviewing regularly is a most important one. If we go over our notes and textbook regularly, they will become more meaningful and be remembered easily. How should we do to develop such a good habit? I think making a practical plan and sticking to it will be of great help. In addition, I think it also important to turn to our teachers for advice. But there also exit many problems. For example, I can’t take down what the teachers say in class. To improve this situation, I decide to learn to take notes quickly and try to focus on the important points. 2013 年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试【天津卷】 第三部分:写作 第一节:阅读表达 阅读短文,按照题目要求用英语回答问题。 My name is Clara. I still remember that chilly December day, sitting in science class. I’d finished a worksheet early and picked up a TIME for Kids magazine. A piece of news caught my eyes: NASA was holding an essay contest to name its Mars rover (火星探测器). Before I even knew anything else about it, a single word flooded my 11-year-old mind: Curiosity. I couldn’t wait for the bell to ring so I could get started in my essay. That afternoon, I raced home, sat down at the computer, and typed until my fingers ached. “Curiosity is an everlasting flame that burns in everyone’s mind…” Five months later, my mom received a phone call, and immediately, a wide smile spread across her face. On August 5, 2012, at 10:31 p.m., the rover named Curiosity touched down safely on the surface of Mars, and I was honored to have a front-row seat in NASA. Curiosity is such an important part of who I am. I have always been fascinated by the stars, the planets, the sky and universe. I remember as a little girl, my grandmother and I would sit together in the backyard for hours. She’d tell me stories and point out the stars. Grandma lived in China, thousands of miles away from my home in Kansas, but the stars kept us together even when we were apart. They were always there, yet there was so much. I didn’t know about them. That’s what I love so much about space. People often ask me why we go to faraway places like Mars. My answer is simple: because we’re curious. We human beings do not just hole up in one place. We are constantly wondering and trying to find out what’s over the hill and beyond the horizon. 56. How did Clara get the news about the essay contest? (no more than 10 words) 57. Why did Clara have a front-row seat in NASA? (no more than 10 words) 58. What does Clara remember about the time spent with Grandma? (no more than 15 words) 59. What does the underlined phrase “hole up” mean? (1 word) 60. In your opinion, why is curiosity important? (no more than 20 words) 【语篇解读】本文是一篇夹叙夹议的文章。通过亲身经历讲述了好奇心的重要性。第 1 段写了故事的背景, 段尾点题:Curiosity;第 2-4 段作者写了以好奇心为题的文章,大获成功;第 5 段提出了中心论点:好奇心 相当重要。因为好奇才充满了对太空的爱。第 6 段总结,呼应全文。 【解题技巧】 1.重首尾:主旨大意题需要注意短文的首段和尾段,因为通常首段是对主题的概述,尾段是对全文的总 结。 2.巧定位:短文转述填空题需要巧妙地利用句中的关键词定位短文中相关的语句。 3.抓细节:封闭性问题需要根据疑问词和关键词抓住短文中的相关事实或细节。 4.明结构:句子填空题需要弄明白短文的篇章结构和上下文的逻辑关系。 【解题思路】 56.直接信息题。封闭性问题,考查对文中具体信息细节的理解。根据解题技巧,定位在第一段 picked up a TIME for Kidsmagazine. A piece of news caught my eyes…问题问的是 Clara 怎样得到作文比赛信息的?因此 可以填:By reading a TIME for Kidsmagazine. Or: From a TIME for Kidsmagazine.。 57. 概括归纳题。要求考生抓住关键词“Curiosity”概括归纳,两个原则:一、必须体现关键词;二、控制不 超过 10 词数。定位在文章的第 2-4 段。根据解题技巧,我们可以概括出:She won the essay contest held by NASA. Or: She named the Mars rover “Curiosity”. Or: “Curiosity” was chosen as the name of the Mars rover.。 58. 信息转换题。封闭性问题,考查对文中具体信息细节的理解与转化。根据解题技巧,定位在第五段 I remember as a little girl, my grandmother and I would sit together in the backyard for hours. She’d tell me stories and point out the stars. Grandma lived in China, thousands of miles away from my home in Kansas, but the stars kept us together even when we were apart. 题干 Clara 记得和祖母在一起度过的是什么?不超过 15 个词,所以我们转化为:She sat together with Grandma listening to her stories about the stars. Or: Her grandma told her stories about the stars. Or: They sat together talking about the stars.。 59. 英文释义题。要求考生理解文中具体语境,根据上下文文推断新生词的词义或是熟词僻义。文章最后 一段 We human beings do not just hole up in one place. 前面强调了好奇心,紧接着后面有 We are constantly wondering and trying to find out what’s over the hill and beyond the horizon.说明 hole up可以理解为:Stay/ Remain /Live /Hide。 60.这是一道开放性问题。要求考生既要概括本文主旨,又要结合实际有自己的对于好奇心的理解。题目要 求不超过 20 个词,所以精炼地总结为: Curiosity is important because it leads to discover or invention. Or: With curiosity, we keep asking questions and exploring the world unknown. Or: Curiosity drives us through our lives so that we never stop wondering about the things beyond our knowledge.。 【长难句学习】 1. That afternoon, I raced home, sat down at the computer, and typed until my fingers ached. “Curiosity is an everlasting flame that burns in everyone’s mind…” 【翻译】那天下午,我飞奔回家,坐在电脑旁,写啊写,指导我的手指疼了为止。“好奇心是一簇燃烧在 每个人心中的永恒的火焰……” 【分析】第一句话一连三个动词:raced, sat, and typed…表明作者写文章的那种迫不及待。作文题目“Curiosity is an everlasting flame that burns in everyone’s mind…”中出现了 everlasting 永久的, 永恒的,that burns in everyone’s mind 定语从句修饰前面的 an everlasting flame。 2. Grandma lived in China, thousands of miles away from my home in Kansas, but the stars kept us together even when we were apart. 【翻译】祖母住在中国,我家在美国堪萨斯州,相隔数千英里,但即便我们分开,星星也会让我们保持在 一起。 【分析】本句出现了两个逗号,两个逗号中间的部分是对 China 的补充说明,Kansas 是美国堪萨斯州。转 折连词 but 突出重点:即便我们分开,星星也会让我们保持在一起。 3. We are constantly wondering and trying to find out what’s over the hill and beyond the horizon. 【翻译】我们不断地想要探索、试图找出山顶上空有什么,海平面下方有什么。 【分析】constantly 持续不断地,修饰 wondering and trying to find out。后面的 what’s over the hill and beyond the horizon 是宾语从句。 题型分析 2013 年天津的作文题仍然同去年一样,属于应用文。去年是邀请函,今年是竞选演讲稿(A Campaign Speech)。要求学生结合自身的个人优势,设想组织校内外活动的活动,贴合学生实际生活,体现了英语 学习应该注意实用性、生活性的原则。应用文较之一般说明文和议论文,与生活、社会联系更紧密,格式、 行文习惯更有规矩,不能随意杜撰。因此要仔细组织语言,合理安排结构。在语言方面,要特别注意简洁 明了,开头要开门见山点出演讲目的。 审题要素 写作时应注意下面几点: (1)注意人称,应该用第一人称的形式,开头第一句已经给出:My name is Li Jin.。 (2)注意时态的正确使用:从试题的内容上可以看出在表达要点 1 应用一般现在时,要点 2 和 3 应 用将来时或者主将从现;要点 4 总结与愿望,会用到一般现在时和将来时,也可以使用 I promise…/ I wish …。 (3)演讲稿的格式正确,语言简练。 (4)注意恰当使用逻辑词语,使各个要点间逻辑连贯,行文通顺。 思路导引 首先,说明演讲目的。(a great honor for, announce, run for, vice president) 第二,介绍个人优势。(pleasant personality, a good team member, advocate the spirit) 第三,设想组织校内外各种活动。(lucky enough , a series of activities) 最后,表达当选的愿望。(cooperate, offer help to, promise) 标准范文 Good afternoon, my dear friends. My name is Li Jin. Thank you for coming to this election campaign today. It is a great honor for me to stand here and announce that I am running for vice president of the Student Union. To begin with, let me introduce myself. As a diligent young man with pleasant personality, I have been always considered to be a good team member. Meanwhile, as a fan of sports I fully realize the importance of teamwork and advocate the spirit of being quicker and stronger. I possess strong determination to achieve the objectives of my team. In addition, I have abundant working experience. So I think I’m qualified to take this position. Looking into the future, I will try my best to serve the students, if I am lucky enough to be the vice president. I plan to have a series of activities both inside and outside school, including holding lectures and English parties in our school, organizing cooperation and exchange programs between schools like debate and speech contests. On the one hand, I will cooperate well with my fellow members of the Union. On the other hand, I will offer help to the students who need our help. I promise I can make it and I wish all of you the best. Thank you. 赏析: 重点短语 a great honor for sb. to do sth.很荣幸做某事;a diligent young man 一个勤奋的年轻人;with pleasant personality 有好的品性;realize the importance of teamwork 意识到团队合作的重要性;advocate the spirit of being quicker and stronger 倡导更快更强的精神; achieve the objectives 实现目标;abundant working experience 丰 富的工作经验;be qualified to 能胜任…… 高级句型 Looking into the future, I will try my best to... , if I am lucky enough to...展望未来,如果我有幸……我会尽全力…… 2013 年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试【新课标 II】 书面表达 题型分析 新课标Ⅱ卷的作文题仍然同去年一样,属于提纲式要点作文,要求学生就所给内容写一封信,是学 生比较熟悉的题材,体现了英语学习应该注意实用性、生活性的原则。提纲类书面表达不是简单的逐条翻 译,而是将所给的几个要点合理的组成比较通顺的语句,因此要仔细组织语言,合理安排结构。在语言方 面,要特别注意简洁明了,开头要开门见山。 审题要素 写作时应注意下面几点: (1)注意人称,应该用第一人称的形式给网友(第二人称)写信。 (2)注意时态的正确使用:从试题的内容上可以看出这封信时态多用一般现在时,但在向网友描述 制作过程的时候,注意时态需要转换为一般过去时。 (3)书信的格式正确,语言简练。 (4)注意恰当使用逻辑词语,使各个要点间逻辑连贯,行文通顺。 思路导引 首先,问候朋友(how are you doing?) 其次,介绍中国结的外观、象征意义以及价格。(5 inches long,4 inches wide, stand for friendship, love and good luck,12.99 dollars each) 最后,阐明自己的一些建议。(know more about, write to me) 标准范文 Dear Tom, How are you doing these days? I wonder if you could sell some Chinese knots for me. I made them myself with red silk threads, cloth and some other materials. They look really beautiful in the shape of a diamond, about 5 inches long and 4 inches wide. In China, these knots stand for friendship、love and good luck. People can either give them as gifts to friends or hang them in their houses. They are only 12.99 dollars each. If anyone wants to know more about the knots, let them write to me. Also, do let me know if you need further information. Thank you! Li Hua 赏析: 重点短语 in the shape of 呈……形状;stand for 代表;either……or 或者…… 或者;further information 进一步的信息 高级句型 Also, do let me …… if you need …… 而且,一定让我……,如果你需要…… 2013 年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试【全国新课标 I 卷】 第二节 书面表达(满分 25 分) 假定你是李华。请你给笔友 Peter 写封信,告诉他你叔叔李明将去他所在城市开会,带去他想要的那 幅中国画,同时询问他是否可以接机。信中还需说明: 李明:高个子,戴眼镜 航班号:CA985 到达:8 月 6 日上午 11:30 注意:1. 词数 100 左右 2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯; 3. 开头语和介绍语已为你写好。 Dear Peter, How are you doing?___________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ Looking forward to your reply. Yours, Li Hua 审题要素 写作时应注意下面几点: (1)注意人称,应该用第一人称的形式给笔友 Peter 写信。 (2)注意时态的正确使用:信中对将来事情(如叔叔开会、航班抵达等)的描述与 x 写信人的请求 应用一般将来时,叔叔李明的情况介绍用一般现在时。 (3)要点全面,层次清楚,语言简练。 (4)注意恰当使用连接词,使各个要点间逻辑连贯,行文通顺。 思路导引 首先,说明写信的目的。(go to ... for a conference; bring; ask for) 其次,交代自己的请求。(do sb. a favor; meet; ) 最后,说明叔叔的体貌特征及所乘航班情况。(tall; wear glasses; flight number; arrive; ) 标准范文 Dear Peter, How are you doing? I’m writing to tell you that my uncle Li Ming is going to your city for a conference, and I’ve asked him to bring you the Chinese painting you’ve asked for before. Also, I’d like you to do me a favor. Would you please meet my uncle at the airport and take him to his hotel since this is the first visit to the U.S.? Thank you in advance! His flight number is CA985, and it will arrive at 11:30 am. August 6. My uncle is tall and he is wearing glasses. And he will be in blue jacket. Looking forward to your reply. Yours, Li Hua 2013 年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试【浙江卷】 第二节:书面表达(满分 30 分) 请以“One Thing I’m Proud of”为题,用英语写一篇 100-120 词的短文,记述一件你自己认为得意的事 情。要求如下: 1.事情的经过; 2.简要说明你感到得意的原因或从中得到的启示。 注意:文章的标题已给出(不计词数) One Thing I’m Proud of 试题分析 今年书面表达的任务有两个特点:一、文体上比较灵活:既可以为以记叙文,也可以为典型的夹叙夹 议文体。二、选题上更具有开放性。这样的命题方式让学生都有话可说,可以充分发挥想象力。但是,开 放性的话题对于考生迅速确定话题并构思素材的能力也是一个非常大的挑战。建议考生在平时的学习中应 养成多多积累写作素材的好习惯,这样在考场上才能更加地得心应手地发挥 本次书面表达的写作任务关键在于素材的选取,考生应先确定写作主题(原因或启示),然后选取素 材。总之,考生应尽量选取自己最得心应手的主题来进行构思写作。 审题要素 写作时应注意下面几点: (1)确定写作主题、选取素材。最容易写的主题如:取得成功、帮助别人等。 (2)人称与时态:因为是讲述自己的经历,故叙述时应采用第一人称的视角。时态的选择上,讲述 事情的经过和原因时应以一般过去时态为主,讲述从中得到的启示,既可以是一般过去时,也可以为现在 时态。 (3)要点全面、层次清楚、语言简练。 (4)注意恰当使用逻辑词语,使各个要点间连贯,行文通顺。 思路导引 首先进行构思,本文可以使用典型的“总-分-总”的三段式结构: 第一段:用一句话引出事件的主题,引出下文。举例:我交了很多朋友。但是有一件事情令我思索: 什么是真正的朋友。 第二段:简要描述事情的经过:注意交代事件的时间、地点、人物、事情的起因、经过、结果。注意 记叙部分常以时间或空间的顺序进行过渡。 第三段:阐述令我自豪的原因或从中得到的启示,并注意与上文的过渡。举例(启示):我把我的进 步归功于 Jenny。(她令)我明白了这样一个道理:真正的朋友不是帮助你作弊的人,而是能够帮助你进 步的人。 满分作文 ①I never forget how proud I felt when I did a favor for a foreigner on the Great Wall. It was cold day during the winter vacation. ②When I, with visitors from my hometown, enjoyed the fantastic view of the Great Wall, a middle-aged foreigner came to me and ask if I could tell him about the wall. ③ Encouraged by the guide, I displayed him a vivid history of the Great Wall in English. The man felt pleased and kept expressing his admiration, ④saying that it was a marvelous wonder in the world. I felt proud at that moment, not only because I was helpful to a foreigner in my country. ⑤ It was also because I, as a Chinese, was proud of our splendid history. ①本文首句便先声夺人,以一个较为复杂的 句子(两个从句层叠)开头:how 后面引导 了一个宾语从句,作 forget 的宾语。另外, 该从句中还包含了一个由 when引导的状语 从句。 ②本句中依旧包含两个从句:由 when 引导 的状语从句,和由 if 引导的宾语从句。另外, 这里巧妙地将介词短语 with visitors from my hometown 处理为插入语,显示出驾驭语 言的水平。 ③本句过去分词短语 Encouraged by…作状 语,从句子结构上提高了语言的档次,同时 对句与句之间的连贯起到了很好的作用。 ④saying that…为现在分词作伴随状语。 ⑤这里巧妙地将 not only because, but also because 处理为两个句子,使句子保持层次 清楚的同时,更加均衡有力。另外,本句将 as a Chinese 处理为插入语,再一次显示出 考生灵活运用语言结构的功底。 【阅卷笔记】 本文可圈可点的地方有很多,简要分析如下: (1)本文思路清晰、结构工整,采取了典型的总-分-总的结构。 (2)本文行文流畅、过渡自然,而且熟练地使用了一些高级结构,如:宾语从句、状语从句、插入语、 介词短语等。体现了考生优秀的语法功底与灵活运用的能力。 (3)本文中值得我们借鉴的短语有:do a favor for sb, enjoy the view, display a history of sth, vivid, expressing one’s admiration (for…), wonder in the world。另外,本文在描述长城、长城的风景和历史时,分别使用了三 个同义词 fantastic,marvelous 和 splendid,显示出作者丰富的词汇功底。 标准范文 One Thing I’m Proud of I remember how I become a good table tennis player. The first day when I went to high school, I saw some of my classmates playing table tennis. Amazed at how skillful they were, I was determined to be just as good. Later on, I often watched them carefully to learn their skill. Then I kept practicing until I became confident enough to challenge the good players. At the end of the term I became one of the best players in my class. I am really proud of this experience, because it helps me realize that we all can fulfill our potential and achieve something through hard work. It also helps me understand the proverb “Practice makes perfect”. 2013 年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试【重庆卷】 五、写作 (共两节,满分 50 分) 第一节:完成句子(共 10 小题;每小题 2 分,满分 20 分) A mother said, "My son is always on the phone, sleeping, out with his friends, or in his room. He never has lime to talk to me. " 写作一 题型分析 这是一篇材料写作题,对考生来说,是高考英语写作中相对比较难的题型。它主要考查考生综合运用 语言的能力,它要求考生读懂材料并明确材料指向,在充分领会材料的前提下,用自己的语言写成一篇内 容充实、语言正确、句子连贯、用词贴切的作文。 审题要素 (1)读懂材料:理清材料思路,明确材料指向,归纳材料要点,把握材料寓意,最终提炼写作中心。 这是材料作文写作的关键 (2)联系实际:联系学习、生活实际,写实事、抒真情、谈看法、说体会 思路导引 第一段:材料复现:透过简短的一句话,看到背后隐藏着父母的无奈与孤单 第二段:联系实际:联系生活实际,写发生在我们身边的实事 第三段:发表观点:呼吁年轻人抽时间经常给父母打打电话或经常陪他们聊聊天 标准范文 "My son is always on the phone, sleeping, out with his friends, or in his room. He never has time to talk to me." The words above show the deep sadness and loneliness of hers as well as other old parents. Nowadays, young men look so busy in modern society that they will never feel free to live or talk with their parents, even on some festival days. However, to the parents, what they really hope for is that their children can come to see them just for a little time or give them a frequent telephone call. The older they get, the more lonely our old parents will feel. However busy we may be, we should try our best to spend more time talking with them and accompanying them. It is not just because they once gave us so much selfless love, but it’s our duty to look after them well. 赏析: 重点短语 the deep sadness and loneliness 深深的忧伤与孤独;hope for… 期 望……;give them a frequent telephone call 经常打电话; 高级句型 It is not because… but... 不是因为……而是…… 第二节:短文写作(共 1 题;满分 30 分) 请根据以下提示,并结合事例,用英语写一篇短文。 We all know that “sticks and stones may break our bones”, but we should also be aware that words can hurt people, too. 注意:①无须写标题,不得照抄英语提示语; ②除诗歌外,文体不限; ③文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称; ④词数为 120 左右。 写作二 题型分析 这是一篇提纲式要点作文,要求学生就所给内容写一封信,是学生比较熟悉的题材,体现了英语学习 应该注意实用性、生活性的原则。提纲类书面表达不是简单的逐条翻译,而是将所给的几个要点合理的组 成比较通顺的语句,因此要仔细组织语言,合理安排结构。在语言方面,要特别注意简洁明了,开头要开 门见山。 审题要素 写作时应注意下面几点: (1)注意人称,应该用第一人称的形式给 WWF(世界自然保护基金组织)写信。 (2)注意内容的完整性,信的内容必须囊括所给的所有要点。 (3)书信的格式正确,语言简练。 (4)注意恰当使用逻辑词语,使各个要点间逻辑连贯,行文通顺。 思路导引 首先,问候语 其次,简述江豚现状,点明写信的目的 第三,希望 WWF 如何帮助(比如:资助江豚保护项目等) 最后,表示感谢并期待回复 标准范文 Dear Sir, How are you doing? Hope everything goes well with you! Right now I am writing to you to tell you something about Yangtze Finless Porpoise. On account of lack of human protection, the number of Yangtze Finless Porpoise is becoming smaller and smaller, only 1000 left up to now. Most of them are dying out. Therefore, it’s time we took immediate measures to change the situation. So I hope WWF will do something to help Yangtze Finless Porpoise by setting up a special fund organization or drawing up some rules on how to protect it and so on. I will be looking forward to your reply. Thank you! Li Hua 赏析: 重点短语 on account of… 由于……;die out 灭绝;take immediate measure 立即采取措施;set … up 建立……;draw … up 起草…… 高级句型 It’s time we…. 是我们……的时候了。
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